Wrote a rap verse

Discussion in 'General' started by Long White Cloud, Dec 13, 2013.

  1. Every now and then I get inspired by a beat and ill write something, it usually gets depressing but let me know what you think

    sneakin through the dark streets speaking to my heartbeat, walkin past the bittersweet memories a symphony in head as I insist I'm better dead, sick, should net a benefit for psychotics, evidence of generous synopsis, naturally I offer up a happy me but really I got apathy to feed my appetite, rapping tactically to ease my mind battery, a cycle where I'm madder at the so called free world survival as it leads suicidal, i dont see no gaining, all i hear complaining, more i spend my days in session brain spins questions patience, insessant blazing makes the week same, déjà vu, just, sitting in the room kicking back with the music, spitting to a track in my thoughts of the future, rip another bong too quick I guess I'm used to the hit, abusive lighter clicks, cue my conscience, useless nonsense, combination of screws combusting, exconeration of skeletons I'm juggling while developing a drug habit, talent lost in smoke, jokes, I don't tell em often, had the whole class dropping laughs it didnt last
     
  2. Pretty gay and only based on the fact that you refer to smoking weed as a "drug habit". 
     
  3. Such alliteration
     
    Like written masturbation
     
    Scribbled in a nation
     
    By people without expectation
     
    Or education
     
    Can barely read the instructions on how to hook up the Play Station
     
    Or the smart phone
     
    No need to leave home
     
    No need to roam
     
    Like a Roman
     
    You can be Julius Caesar
     
    In pixels
     
    Electronic dick-cells
     
    Ready to become a boner
     
    But your girl is just a loaner
     
    Like an Acura Integra
     
    Be careful not to impregnate her
     
    And become another "baby daddy"
     
    And watch the bitch become a fatty
     
    And then you'll never be happy
     
    No smoking weed
     
    And taking nappies
     
    Just a shitty job repeating infinity
     
    It's like insanity
     
    A panic attack
     
    Always attacking me
     
    Tracking me
     
    And then comes the clarity
     
    My life is not a rarity
     
    Everyone writes poetry
     
    Or at least one poem
     
    The only spotlight of fame
     
    Is the one at the tip of your dome
     
    Your only microphone
     
    Is the bent one in your hand
     
    You beat off to the fantasy
     
    Of fronting a band
     
    And then the alarm clock rings
     
    And stings like a wasp
     
    Awake again, finally
     
    Time to work for a boss
     
    You gott a be like Bon Jovi
     
    Ride that steel hoss
     
    To the job
     
    Say, "Yes sir!" to Bob
     
    And cut your loss
     
    When you get paid
     
    Take that check
     
    Get high
     
    Maybe get laid
     
    But there's never enough
     
    To hire a maid
     
    And order her to make you some Kool-Aid
     
    Drink it in the shade
     
    On a hot day in summer
     
    It's what some people used to do
     
    Back in the day
     
    When there were slaves
     
    Out in the field
     
    Singing the blues
     
    To shuffles and taps
     
    All that stuff
     
    Evolved into my being here
     
    and this rap
     
    *snap*
     
    :)
     
  4. #4 Long White Cloud, Dec 13, 2013
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    That was actually pretty damn nice
    I just wish you'd contained it better
     
  5. Chilling on the porch with my bic blowtorch I got a feeling that the war is in effect, been appealing to this dialect respect i try and get, No triumph yet, freting over deception, greedy politics been picking checks while kids are sitting on the steps with no dollars, no college education cause the motto isn't patience it's statistical, its paper, the learning isn't visual, relatable, the shit they say to you can make your mood, call you dirt when it just ain't the truth, major in the loop we're made to view its our contagion, move away from superficial groups that make my brain spin, super visible aim to make you feel stupid, isn't it lame, isn't it ill to believe the real enemy was just a business entity, if anything I shouldn't look for justice in ascendancy cause other than depending on the money all your friends become dummies, defend your lump sums, while some dont even got lunch, fuck hip hop if its such a wristwatch cost means you hit the spotlight, don't wanna lift off that's fake, like laughs in a sitcom that ain't great, you know behind the smokescreen every bodies lonely, we just keep it low key, some of us look to smoking to comfort our understanding, if only, we weren't animals then maybe we have it all, as the atoms vibrate I realise fates lies, stare at mine in the wake, theorise I might stay, life changed one day I couldn't figure mine, arithmetic as I am, this insidious design would bite back, we all die, recognise it isn't hype that defines its your vibes
     
  6. well its a drug. And a habit. So yeah, its a drug habit.
     
  7.  
    i just wrote a 16 bar
     
    nigganigganigganigganigaganiag
    fuckshitfuckfuckfshitfuckshit
    nignignignigga hustle hard hard hard (fade)
    aniggapullatriggashootdanigga call that bad weather
    shitbitchdickshits#dickswag
     
  8. My nigga my nigga my nigga my nigga my nigga my nigga my nigga........ There's my rhymes..... Jk....
     
  9. 16 bar = 16 bars
     
    thast 5 you are missing 11
     
  10. it repeats 3.2 more times
     
  11. Titty baconGirl why you fakenI know you want deez nuts on yo chinSperm on yo teeth while grinIf you guys havent noticed im a pro
     
  12. two thumbs up,masterpiece of the year
    it changed my life in more ways than one
    a true inspiration to us all
    academy award nominee 
    the most thrilling ride of the summer
     
  13. Sittin by my woodstove
    Basking in the heat
    My ass is nice 'in comfy
    In this fluffy seat
     
  14.  
    I didnt see anything in there about love between two people of the same sex, did I miss it??
     
     
     
    ps, there is a music section, and within that a section to share your work, so you dont have to deal with "Thats gay" comments, as well as posting in the appropriate place.  
     
  15. Agreed, I feel like describing things you don't like as " gay" is very outdated and ignorant. No offense to anyone, it just irks me
     
  16.  
    don't listen to this a*****e; he ain't wrote s**t!
    except for bathroom graffiti, with little pictures of d**ks!
     
    he probably goes to Everest College, and smokes weed in the stalls.
    askin' "how'd i end up here?!", while he's tuggin' on his balls!
     
  17. dont be a homo.
     
  18. im rappin on the city cause i pity rhymes so miserable 
    dismal how this shitty little pretty boy be spittin those
    lines of flowers sour take a bit of coke n hit this smoke 
    take it to the brain and now the cane will put u in a hole
     
  19. 'coz i spit hot fiya!
     

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