what do u think of me as a rapper

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by paromemusic, Jun 5, 2012.

  1. #1 paromemusic, Jun 5, 2012
    [ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=agHHOf3-s8w&feature=youtube_gdata_player]Heart Attack (poem) - YouTube[/ame]
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    poem i wrote


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    [ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G5wcr8TvJYk&feature=youtube_gdata_player]Trill Young Nigga - YouTube[/ame]
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    me really rapping



    let me know what you think or what u think i can improve on.
     
  2. #2 b lewis, Jun 5, 2012
    Its pretty good if your flow was a little more smooth I'd bump that shit
     
  3. #3 paromemusic, Jun 5, 2012
    :) thank you
     
  4. #4 Dankfoshooo, Jun 5, 2012
    Work on your flow and delivery and you'll be golden.
    :wave:
     
  5. #5 paromemusic, Jun 5, 2012
    can u be more specific abt delivery?
     
  6. #6 HomeAllDayHerbz, Jun 5, 2012
    sounds like some cliche lyrics about bullshit .

    and why fuck with your voice like that ? keep it simple

    buuuut , your flow is there .
     
  7. #7 paromemusic, Jun 5, 2012
    i just wanted to make a screwed song. im from south tx n thats pretty bug around here.
     
  8. #8 chronicman00, Jun 5, 2012
    shits clean still a little rough

    its there though
     
  9. #9 Budbarian420, Jun 6, 2012
    You say your a real ***** but your white... but besides that pretty good work on your flow and dont make a habit of rapping with altered voice.
     
  10. #10 paromemusic, Jun 6, 2012

    technically i said trill not real n im not white im mexican. i guess i shouldve said trill young beaner lmao. thanks for the feedback tho bro :)
     
  11. #11 paromemusic, Jun 6, 2012
    anybody else give it a listen?
     
  12. #12 pompins, Jun 15, 2012
    cant really here what your saying man =/ if you made it abit clearer and made the flow abit more smooth it could be dope
     
  13. #13 egnops das bob, Jun 15, 2012
    Second one was much better :D
     
  14. #14 whatupdun, Jun 15, 2012
    real *****s dont take mirror pics...
     

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