what do you think? T H E F E R R I S W H E E L Part One The wind blew from the east A million lights lit up the dark "Step up" the young man said "Take a ride on Noah's Ark" "Grandpa, can we go?" The twins said without delay "Sure", the old man replied As he watched them run away Dr. Fogg's Carnival of Fun "Amazing Things that seem un-real" "Could it be?" the old man wondered aloud He would have to check out the ferris wheel Fifty six years ago In a place much like this place His first wife and son got on the ride And vanished without a trace The police had looked for clues But in the end there were none to be found He had to watch the carnival pack up and move While he had to stand around Eventually, he re-married New life, made many new friends They had two of their own children One of them had had twins But he never forgot his first family At nights it would tear him up inside This carnival show, over 50 years ago Their last ferris wheel ride Suddenly he felt a little scared A feeling of deja vous He would look for that ferris wheel But if he found it.. what would he do? Part Two He was about ready to give up One more place he thought he would try When in the darkness he saw something Out of the corner of his eye He had spotted the monster ride In the dark with no lights at all He knew it was the very same one By the details he could recall The seats were painted golden The lift itself was a dark brown A voice inside seemed to call out "Come on Daddy, sit down.." He knew that voice from anywhere But there was just no way it could be Willy had went missing Far back in 1953 But yet, it WAS Willy's voice Ooh, how he missed it so "Don't be afraid honey" The wind seemed to blow Julia? he knew it was her voice, but how? This defied everything he knew "Ooh honey, take a seat Willy and I are both waiting on you.." The old man threw away logic Took a seat, closed his eyes He felt the cold wind blow through his hair As he was lifted up into the skies The lights of the carnival faded Then they appeared bright once more Soon the ride was over And a worker opened the door.. Part Three The second his feet was on the ground His child ran to grab his leg "Ooh Daddy, lets all ride the merry-go-round" "Willy, you know better than to beg!" Julia laughed and kissed him The second her lips touched his skin He realized he was no longer an old man He was 25 again He knew the calender said 1953 In Korea, peace they would declare Eisenhower was President Frank Sinatra ruled the air Meanwhile, he still held 56 years of memories Of his other life with all it's charms "Ooh Daddy, I'm so glad we came.." He hugged Willy in his arms.. Still, not far away in another time The twins called their parents, distraught Who called the Police, who came right away Everyone searched the entire lot They questioned the owner, a Dr. Fogg Who said in a voice quiet and low "Something like this happened once before A long, long time ago.." After a month with no clues A memorial service was held in his name Mostly attended by friends and family But there was one strange man who came He introduced himself as Willie He left a flower and a poem He wrote: "Your the best Dad, I ever had Thank you for coming home..."
[quote name='"darksmoker"']22 views, no replies?[/quote] It wasn't to shabby. You should extend it. Like maybe the ferris wheel is a way to an alternate universe that's in the year 1953.
i've thought about it, but it's quite long already. i dont really want readers to get bored of it by making it too long, you know?
[quote name='"darksmoker"'] i've thought about it, but it's quite long already. i dont really want readers to get bored of it by making it too long, you know?[/quote] It's not even remotely long. I think you might be on to something with the ferris wheel time travel idea thing. If you find a way to make it longer like a book long let me know and I'd love to read it.
