[ame]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n62AFhJmqLo&feature=plcp[/ame] I can hardly afford to the pay the piper and the pipers lookin for more the crooked sword had me lookin to score had me lookin in drawers with a book in the door crook on the floor, i wanted more than the kush and the whores Then the light went off I went to push in the cord I thought the bill wasn't paid but ive been good with the chores patiently waitin for grace while I'm escapin the days scrapin for pay I guesss I needa way to straightin the grades im not ok been achin of pain, prayin in rain screamin out loud, forsaken his name taken the blame pacin and pacin movin from station to station been tastin disgrace as I'm fakin the statements it takes shape, make haste but there's nowhere to hide tho, the earth that I've come to known has turned my home into a slide show where I keep my eyes closed thinkin of my past life I use to shine like the flashin sign of my gas light and raps like my only escape, I needa take ten I rather have none than fake friends, that makes sense it's not common tho ive been fallin like dominoes wonderin if ill ever even stop it yo my life was beautiful, now it's unusual start to hate the world and the feelins been mutual bitin down to cuticles confined inside a cubicle thinkin of ways for my ways to be excusable here but removable, facts been disputable will it be irrefutable before my funeral I call them delusional, they call me un suitable feel like I've been judged and on trial like the crucible I'm grown now but my thoughts feel juvenile mountains ain't budgin my faiths not movable the path's not lucrative, but it beats runnin like a fugitive, I gotta a hard time just provin it exists, rational thoughts out the window starin at the ceiling, distrought on my pillow I've been broke, been so soaked since the intro between heaven and hell man I've been in limbo facin a bad situation, heart racin, start pacin taught to start praisin days in, been escapin with the trade winds start to give it up like I have been raised in a patient engagement of the old graces the ancient places, oh they're so spacious it's outrageous, but it's the basis of greatness, traced with the face of the pages my arteries been apart of me I outta be treadin on this thin ice tonight rather cautiously in turn the fired burned to a slow smolder it froze over, he gave me the cold shoulder the fatherly figure, somberly pictured that lives lived under poverty do deliever streams down the river, dreams of the maker it seems we suceed as the seeds of the savior love thy neighbor, love thy nature died in the chamber, one rise later but who created the creator, i waver its the suns day, not a day for great labor so i take my taperin faith and make haste it's been a long road, pace the great race to the answers, why is there cancer, why is evil pampered while a childs bloods bein transfered i question it, can you blame me for bein hesitant? it's hard to represent heaven sent with no evidence i reminicse that heaven is so excelleant the book of genesis couldn't be that testament or is it, I wish I could visit, implicit trust that it exists so faith wouldn't imprison us
[ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n62AFhJmqLo&feature=plcp]philly- Purgatory (J dilla- Purple Instrumental) - YouTube[/ame] I can hardly afford to the pay the piper and the pipers lookin for more the crooked sword had me lookin to score had me lookin in drawers with a book in the door crook on the floor, i wanted more than the kush and the whores Then the light went off I went to push in the cord I thought the bill wasn't paid but ive been good with the chores patiently waitin for grace while I'm escapin the days scrapin for pay I guesss I needa way to straightin the grades im not ok been achin of pain, prayin in rain screamin out loud, forsaken his name taken the blame pacin and pacin movin from station to station been tastin disgrace as I'm fakin the statements it takes shape, make haste but there's nowhere to hide tho, the earth that I've come to known has turned my home into a slide show where I keep my eyes closed thinkin of my past life I use to shine like the flashin sign of my gas light and raps like my only escape, I needa take ten I rather have none than fake friends, that makes sense it's not common tho ive been fallin like dominoes wonderin if ill ever even stop it yo my life was beautiful, now it's unusual start to hate the world and the feelins been mutual bitin down to cuticles confined inside a cubicle thinkin of ways for my ways to be excusable here but removable, facts been disputable will it be irrefutable before my funeral I call them delusional, they call me un suitable feel like I've been judged and on trial like the crucible I'm grown now but my thoughts feel juvenile mountains ain't budgin my faiths not movable the path's not lucrative, but it beats runnin like a fugitive, I gotta a hard time just provin it exists, rational thoughts out the window starin at the ceiling, distrought on my pillow I've been broke, been so soaked since the intro between heaven and hell man I've been in limbo facin a bad situation, heart racin, start pacin taught to start praisin days in, been escapin with the trade winds start to give it up like I have been raised in a patient engagement of the old graces the ancient places, oh they're so spacious it's outrageous, but it's the basis of greatness, traced with the face of the pages my arteries been apart of me I outta be treadin on this thin ice tonight rather cautiously in turn the fired burned to a slow smolder it froze over, he gave me the cold shoulder the fatherly figure, somberly pictured that lives lived under poverty do deliever streams down the river, dreams of the maker it seems we suceed as the seeds of the savior love thy neighbor, love thy nature died in the chamber, one rise later but who created the creator, i waver its the suns day, not a day for great labor so i take my taperin faith and make haste it's been a long road, pace the great race to the answers, why is there cancer, why is evil pampered while a childs bloods bein transfered i question it, can you blame me for bein hesitant? it's hard to represent heaven sent with no evidence i reminicse that heaven is so excelleant the book of genesis couldn't be that testament or is it, I wish I could visit, implicit trust that it exists so faith wouldn't imprison us
What do you mean? You just posted a video and some lyrics, what sort of support were you expecting? Were you looking for feedback, or to make it on the grasscity music section musicians in u subforum? I would say the vocals need to be tighter, and a lot of those lines don't make sense to me like the majority of this part, I see where you're going many places but it seems like you're forcing stuff in to make it fit and it's coming out as nonsensical: facin a bad situation, heart racin, start pacin taught to start praisin days in, been escapin with the trade winds start to give it up like I have been raised in a patient engagement of the old graces the ancient places, oh they're so spacious it's outrageous, but it's the basis of greatness, traced with the face of the pages my arteries been apart of me I outta be treadin on this thin ice tonight rather cautiously in turn the fired burned to a slow smolder it froze over, he gave me the cold shoulder the fatherly figure, somberly pictured that lives lived under poverty do deliever streams down the river, dreams of the maker it seems we suceed as the seeds of the savior