Ever been in love?

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by Buddey, Sep 24, 2009.

  1. #1 Buddey, Sep 24, 2009
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    Well, I can't stop thinking about her. And I made this after blazing one day. When I wrote it I was thinking of kinda writing song, so I guess its a poem/song, but isn't that pretty much what they are? Anyways here it is, tell me what you think? :) -

    "Have you ever imagined the perfect one;
    Looking around, never stopping till' the break of the sun;
    You'll know it when sparks fly when our eyes connect;
    We sit down talk for hours and watch the sunset;
    When were together, its as if we have no clue;
    I know that our love is so pure and true;
    Whenever your around, I feel all fuzzy inside;
    I'll never not think of you, your always on my mind;
    Your so beautiful the way you do it, you do just fine;
    One day I hope that you will be called mine;
    I'm always thinking of you, even if we part ways;
    I love you, and I always will till' the end of our days."



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  2. cool man..i like writing poetry to express my feelings...the only thing is, nobody but me knows about them:D(well i guess if you're reading this you know now)
     
  3. Yeah me too, and thanks for responding. I didn't know if it was good or not lol.
     
  4. Not bad at all, bt you should keep a standard rhyming scheme, and try not to repeat some of the same rhymes. Other than that its really nice.:hello:
     
  5. ive felt love...not for a human tho :)
     
  6. well i fell into what i thought was love,but it was lust.
     
  7. :bolt:
     

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