A little poem i wrote

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by Jacobstern93, May 17, 2010.

  1. So I wrote this out of nowhere, for fun. here we go.

    I've spoken with death
    smelled the stench of his foul breath.
    I asked him if he would but please take me away,
    but he said today was not my day.
    He told me to keep living life
    to grow old, and have a wife.
    But I said that wasn't for me
    So instead It was I who took away he.

    I don't really like the ending, but I couldn't think of anything else. Please give me feedback.
  2. Endings are tough sometimes ! heres one I wrote that kind of proves that point :

    At the writing of verse I am not deft,
    I always end up with something left, over ! :D
  3. Haha that actually took me a second the figure it out. I'll just have to work on writing more.

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