A couple of my poems, please comment!

I lay my head down at your feet,
cuz in the battle ive been beat
dont fear lads i am the one,
let it be known, my will be done

im the mad with wooden bat
swing it round my mighty axe
im too strong for my own good
this power in me misunderstood

i write the scroll that told the word
this mighty tale that i have heard
i share with others so they can know
because the voices told me so




chronicle of disaster


I wrote my story,
across the page.
will you listen,
ears engage?

Lady spilling,
wine on dress.
does she know,
shes a drunken mess?

No worries, thats my wish
wish i was, numb to pain
but pain seems to be the only thing i feel
it seems to fall on me like rain.

Man with with cane,
needs help walking,
stumbling down the street.
no one helps him,
no one cares,
as he trips over his feet.

he falls down,
flight of stairs,
down these stairs,
body fell
no one even helped this man,
this world has gone to hell.

No one helps but for themself,
greed is the way of life,
rich man, cheap hooker,
fuckin cheating on his wife.

Take money, from the poor,
shoot em alll, in the head,
is this how we want it,
soon the good will all be dead.

Fucked up shit is raining down,
nothing can help the cloud.
broken glass, time will pass,
all will sucumb, and forget the past.





I need someone to love me



as i lay in bed at night,
tucked underneath my covers,
i start to think about my life,
many things i start to wonder

i think about how i need someone
someone i can tell them i adore
someone i can so i love you
and they say i love you more

someone i can cuddle with
and give them a sweet, gentle kiss
someone who when were not together
im the one that they miss

i want someone to say im cute
and i say not as cute as you
and then i say u mean the world
and they say so do you

this is my dream at night
but is a dream all it is?
cause if this dream doesnt come true

i dont know how i can live




King of Godly Age



rock wall, avalanch,
purple haze of turkey ranch
steal the tree, of its branch
kick the farmer, take a stance

donkey reighns
eat the wheat
save the flower
eat the beats

dont know who
killed the flock
egypt mistress
sucked the cock

wavy sirens ground of grass
what the flock of fishing bass
lose the horse and ride an ass
up the sun till star will pass




I need my happy
if i am happy
let it be it
let it be life
try try to push it away
it gets stronger
it flows back in
in the minds eternal bin
will this ever end
this perfect illusion?
i hope not
i wanna be fooled.

The wall tuned to scribbles
it turned to candles
drifted off
it was a castle
changed before my eyes
song dies
wall cries
good bye