Post your poetry, share your thoughts

Discussion in 'Philosophy' started by k0rps, Jan 2, 2012.

  1. I wish I would have written when I was younger but now I just spew crazy stuff like this..
     
     
    In my mind the dreams collide and crash upon the waves
    my brain and flashes of life and anything good just fades away
    I'm partly insane and slowly decayed i'm hardly a human at all
    I try to fit in and try to do right and be a man that stands tall
    but the bullshit cascades and the light soon but fades
    and all I hit is a wall..
    once my mind soon subsides and slowly comes down to a halt
    i try and find the peace inside but realize i'm made of salt
    salt and bone and energy n skin and all of the things between
    part god part demon part angelic spirit until the chains give in
    i wish I could just change the world but noone fuckin cares
    i wish I could just scream and shout but noones fuckin there
    my mind told me that one day that the sea and flames will rise
    and all the things i picture inside will appear right before my eyes...

     
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  2. #162 Tiama Plop, Jun 17, 2015
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    Yeah I like that one I did when I was younger. It basically means that every single day was dark empty and depressing, but that I would never give up in the hope that eventually a day would come along that changed that. Teenage angst / BPD basically but with a twist of optimism. Sometimes just a tiny spark is all you need to show you the way.
     
    Yours is crazy haha but it's good, I like it. It's very expressive and has a nice flow / rhyme structure. I liked you one on the previous page as well, you're a decent poet.
     
    What does this mean?
     
    salt and bone and energy n skin and all of the things between
    part god part demon part angelic spirit until the chains give in
     
    My interpretation is that you are all of these things, but not out of choice, and that it not the real you. In other words you are unable to be your true self in the world we live in?
     
    Since that first one I did as a teenager I've only really written love poems which is kinda lame but I will share them anyway.
     
    This one I wrote to tell my girlfriend I love her for the first time, which was on her birthday and came with an 8 diamond necklace with two interlocking gold hearts that I'd been holding onto for about 8 years waiting for the right person to give it to. I'd had 3 semi-serious relationships with girls I loved in those 8 years but for some reason never decided to give them the necklace. Me and girlfriend now had only been going out a month or so at the time but I guess sometimes you just know!
     
     
    We're grown so close like wheat on farms
    From Victoria Quays to eachothers arms

    I guess I knew from the start

    That you were my friend, accomplice and sweetheart

    So as our souls connect and our futures show
    There's something you should know

    It feels so right, so real, so true
    <Her name>, I love you

     
     
    Note: Victoria Quays is a place where we used to meet right in the beginning. It is like the end of a canal where I would skate while she rolls spliffs and then we'd smoke and chat until silly o clock in the morning by the canal, the foundation of our relationship if you will. This is it:
     
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    And then this one, because I was bored as work:
     
     
    There's something about you
    That makes the sun shine brighter
    Life more colourful
    And the peaceful moments quieter

    When I see your face
    The sparkle in your eyes
    And I glimpse inside
    To that beautiful place where your soul resides

    It makes me smile

    There's something about you
    Realer than trees, the leaves
    Realer than the air we breathe
    And I know in my heart that we're meant to be

    Because this feeling

    It makes me feel complete

     
     
    I've done some rapping as well I'll see if I can dig it up. I think the lyrics and flow and that was pretty good but stylistically more like poetry to music ya know? Not hip hop which has become so ubiquitous with rapping. Don't get me wrong I love hip hop but that's just not my own personal style. Some of it is actually really dark/deep now I think about it.
     
  3. hah thanks yeah I know what you mean about the dark constant and always telling yourself days will be better, glad we finally reached that stage! I never even knew I liked writing until one day I just did it and ever since I've been just trying to tweak my style and incorporate what goes on to what I write. Those poems you posted above are nice though, really good flow and I like how you used your relationship foundation in the poem to really set the stage. I also have tried my hand at rapping and freestyle mic nights but just can't find the right beat that I can vibe with, it's either acapella or it has to happen randomly in my case lol
     
    as far as what that line means I sometimes look at myself as an entity that is free flowing through the energies of space n time and just happened to stop in this body to see what life is like during this time period so yes exactly what you stated lol. idk why I feel this way but just always have its strange when you think about it. I feel like i've lived thousands of years and i'm slowly running out of energy. 
     
  4. On the way back from the track I dropped my snack pack
    People lookin and laughin cause my snack all black
    I sat on the curb like a warm cheese curd

    wishing I had my snack back and wasn't such a nerd.

     
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  5. Relationship

    Love me or kill me
    sew me or tear me
    ridicule and respect me
    take a part and morph to your own
    come closer and touch me
    take me back home

    can you see my face?
    can you tell my stare?
    straight through you into we
    take a step, touch me, touch me

    dusty despair clinging on this bottle
    shelved for ages waiting to break
    drink the glass melted together
    give me a reason to stay

    The Popper

    The pill popper plunges down the hole, rummaging for scraps unwanted.
    A scavenger of mind and heart along the tunnel of societies haunted.
    Orbs of energy illuminate the hieroglyphic walls set as law.
    But the pill popper pushes whichever which side will fall.
    Carving another escape, taking further his own demise,
    It's no wonder why the popper collapses,
    under caps of cracked stone lies.
    It's no surprise.
     
  6. #167 DankBarbie, Nov 18, 2016
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    One foot in the grave and looking towards the heavens
    Reaching for the stars, I jumped, and never landed

    :)


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  7. Not so much a poem,as it is a rap. I wrote this back in 1987. I also wrote music to it too. Gangsta rap was at it's peak in 1987. So I wrote a gansta rap song.

    I'm a crip from Compton
    I'm a blood from Watts
    I got an UZI in my hand and I call the shots
    I got an UZI in my hand, I got my finger on the trigger
    And I'll blow you away cause i'm a mean fuckin nigga.

    The po po say there aint nothing I can do
    But there is one thing I do a lot better than you
    I can raaaaaaaaaaaaaaap
    Yeah listen to me raaaaaaaaaaaaaaaap

    Don't you preach to me 'bout no law and order
    You read me my rights
    And I'll be fuckin your daughter
    I'm thirsty bitch now go get me some water
    I do as I please I do as I oughta!

    Coty
     
  8. #169 cashewmilk, Nov 18, 2016
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