I once knew the meaning of life, now, all I feel is strife. All is right when you are content. When the meaning is lost, you feel spent. Everyone has their own reason, but forgetting the meaning of life is still treason. The truth runs deep, it can be hard to see, but when you remember the meaning of life, you're free. I once knew the meaning of life, now, all i feel is strife. Just wrote this, what do you think.
honestly?...if you rewrite the whole thing without trying extremely hard to make it rhyme, i think you would be able to convey your message much better.....
I like it. I disagree with the advice given above, I don't think you think you should change a thing. If anything, add to it dude. This is what the artist corner is all about. Keep it real.
Just a tip, the whole rhyming every two lines is kindergarden stuff. Just my opinion. Immortal Technique is one of my favorite lyricists. IMMORTAL TECHNIQUE LYRICS - The Prophecy The rhyme can go for more than one line. Try to bind with the lyrics of the time. Release all that you believe like the energy of the seas. You see? Yes that was crap but the first line rhymed and I was bored