hey... this is an older song i wrote (like 2 years ago). it starts off with the chorus, then goes into the song from there. the chorus goes: Tell me when When will the sun shine on these eyes? Tell me when When will I come out of disguise? Tell me when When will I live the life they see? Tell me when When will there be something more to me? Verse 1: And this fire that once burned brightly Now flickers inside of me Staring in the mirror Can't stand the sight I see Now I am picking up the pieces Of the life I used to live There's nothing more inside of me No nothing left to give The struggle has a purpose For what I do not know Why won't these chains fall from me? Why won't they let me go? (Repeat Chorus) Verse 2: They really think they know me But there's more than meets the eye They don't see what I cover up They don't see the tears I hide They refuse to see beyond the mask I put up to hide from them Everyday it's just the same old thing Time and time again There's something buring within my bones It's more than I can tame It wants to put an end to this An end to this game (Repeat Chorus) thanks for taking the time to read this... as always, comments are welcome
Cottons, this is really good stuff! I'd love ta hear the music along with it. You DO have a gift and you should use it! You ought to be writing everyday. You'd be amazed what comes out and don't be afraid to post it where people can read and respond. There are hundreds of "poetry boards" out there but I think the people here are a better audience! Da"Please, Post More"Captn
i did a majority of my writing back when i was like 14... and trust me on this one. most of it wasn't good, lol. as for now, i try to write and nothing comes out. i need to find ways of putting into words what i'm feeling inside... ahhhh! i hate writer's block, lol. anywayz, i've got a few more i could post, and as more comes (slowly but surely) i'll post it
I have been inan extended peroid of writers BLOCK since 9/11...Can't even write my name right...it's a horrible thingum ta have but God in His wisdom gave me my "art" stuff to do while waiting on the writing to come back. You are doing fine! Just wait and it will come back even better than before! Da"Hang In There & Fire One Up"Captn