Stanzas from the Stoned

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by Satori Taima, Apr 16, 2007.

  1. Here are just a few poems I wrote very recently.

    Dank catnip, I swear!
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~
    Awoken afternoon, such sleep so serene
    A smoke I desired, such pot so supreme
    Gone were my jeans; contents they spilled
    Realization; bad thoughts my mind filled

    “Are you addicted, do you need rehab?”
    I am not inflicted, but weed indeed I do dab
    “I don't smoke cigs, I don't drink much beer”
    I do toke up, but father; please lend me your ear

    Society is strange, why cannabis so clandestine?
    Piety we uphold, yet alcohol we consume
    Overdose on aspirin, but for weed they confine!
    The truth so vague, all ignorance presume

    Addiction and pot, a correlation inane
    On the whim I can stop, for dear Mary Jane
    But unlike caffeine, and unlike nicotine
    Unlike heroin, crack, or cocaine
    Withdrawals are none, no overdose scene

    I can't expect to change your mind
    Preconceived ideas, none such benign
    Skeptical, to believe your child's plea
    Later on, one day I hope you shall see.

    The American Dream
    ~~~~~~~~
    Good father, good husband
    Good children, good life

    Honest worker he is, role model that is
    Provides for his family, a job in realty

    With diligence he works, with late nights on the job
    He comes home to comfort, light a joint and relax

    Tired of shady dealings, tired of buying pot
    He bought two seeds, planted them in clay pots

    They grew and blossomed, in a shed of the backyard
    But the smell came too strong, no neighbor disregard

    His house got raided, assault rifles and guns,
    His wife and little children, too scared to run

    They seized his two plants, they cuffed his two hands
    “I grew them for myself, myself and I only!”

    The judge knew no different, charged with intent to sell
    His family had no money, too much money for his bail

    So his children now left, raised without a father
    A divorce and no child support, a full-time working mother
    The kids grew up in dysfunction, hard drugs and meth

    They say a crime is when someone is being harmed
    But damage done more from “justice”, an entire family,
    More harm than already done.
     
  2. ... and other random verses about rolling.

    Senses, they roll
    ~~~~~~~~
    Rolling rolling, sound I hear
    Waves of bliss across my ear
    Picture perfect, on a wall
    A viewer’s pleasure, in it all
    Fingers tingles at its tips
    Lest I take another rip
    Night borne; morning
    Morning borne; light
    A mind-full still clever
    Like I roll on forever

    Stopper, stop her!
    ~~~~~~~
    After a tablet and a half
    And a mouthful of aqua
    Zach’s content, on his behalf
    Anxious, we await the aftermath

    A game of Russian roulette?
    Getting shot, with dismay it was met
    Why is it… a Nerf to the head
    Is almost as fun, as not being dead?

    Disappointed, these tabs surely don’t work!
    “Fifteen bucks man, what the hell?”
    Disappointed, tomorrow they go to work…
    The tabs; an outcome we hoped well

    But mazes intricate, maps Michael’s mind
    His words rained rapid; ripples on river water.
    For nature never stops, its flows of any kind
    Likewise his mouth, of such exist no stopper

    Music? Yes, still thumping in my membrane
    But extended discussion; constant tangents
    “Chill-out man! You’re going way insane!”
    Back and forth, “more room!” he complained
    Forward and back, an Olympic mad man he went

    Calling calling; Sam, with consistence.
    Zach, give direction from his distance!
    “Left left on that, right right on this”
    Daftly deranged, we still roll outrageous

    Sam and Fatima, eventually, they arrive
    Zach and I, to synthetic beats, melody come alive
    Michael, his inner thoughts, true words derive

    Together, deep within, our minds we then dive
     
  3. This next poem is very dark, traditionally not my style at all but I enoyed writing it. I'm also attaching a poem that is also very experimental, resembling two sides of the same, a "butterfly". It can only be viewed as a word document, because the forum's text boxes do not properly recognize spaces in the verse.

    Prison Pain
    ~~~~~~~~
    Under the blossom tree
    holding your teddy bear
    you slowly wake up now
    your on the nightmare brink

    Trapped in an enclosed room
    you watch through the window
    the children laugh and play
    you slowly wave at them
    they quickly run away

    In complete isolation
    the windows are nailed shut
    you slowly stand up now
    an end to filling days

    Enter the realm of hell
    plead "no more days longer"
    you slowly say to him
    "I finished the quota"

    Dead for eternity

    and indeed

    the pain is now no more...
     

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  4. the first one was funny, i like what you're saying. a bit hard to follow with the vocabulary and the poetic structures and rhyme schemes, but i get ya.

    others might not, but i think that just makes em retarded.
    good to see the stoned minds of america producing good work.

    but the second one, american dream was better, i think.

    have you ever thought of moving away from traditional poetic structure, the rhyme schemes and perfect meter?
    i like the modern feel, a little more, like Jim Morrison...it seems more accessible.

    anywho, look forward to more work.
    i'll prolly comment on the others later, but im in school right now.
     
  5. can you give us a little more background on "prison pain"? it's aethetically pleasing to read, floats off the tongue, but i dont quite understand the butterfly/prison comparison? im not sure
     
  6. Senses, they roll
    ~~~~~~~~
    Rolling rolling, sound I hear
    Waves of bliss across my ear
    Picture perfect, on a wall
    A viewer's pleasure, in it all
    Fingers tingles at its tips
    Lest I take another rip
    Night borne; morning
    Morning borne; light
    A mind-full still clever
    Like I roll on forever


    hahah, this one's awesome. i love it. very clever word-play, completely accessible, yet intelligent. reminds me of "across the universe" by the beatles/lennon.
     
  7. Thanks guys, I really appreciate the comments. I actually wrote the first 4 poems the same night I rolled for the first time, and for some reason my mind locked into very rhyme-like schemes with irregular patterns. Typically, my poems have similiar subjects, but the poetic structure is more like "Prison Pain". "Stopper, stop her!" is basically the backstory to what actually happened with my friends and myself that same night.

    When I wrote "Prison Pain", I perceived a little girl who wakes up from a nightmare, crying for her father who had commited suicide in prison. I was also inspired by "To Kill a Mockingbird", with Boo Radley and Tom Robinson.

    "Butterfly" are the two things that I personally struggle with, that is, the subject of motivation for a realistic goal and the desires for a dream out of reach.
     

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