song i wrote.

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by Tokamano8o, Jun 9, 2007.

  1. Witness the hopelessness
    Its all around you
    Hopelessness...The only promise kept to me
    Emptiness fills the endless
    Endless...Pain continuing
    Living in a black and white world
    Solid Grey
    Closer and closer to shame you put upon my chest
    Its caving in, crushing the feeling away
    Fuck the popularity, everyone is so fake
    Pointless is my method
    Accusations laid upon me
    I see only salvation but welcome the evil
    a faint sound in this scattered existence
    In a void of space
    Im never alone
    your never alone
    lets die together
    my sweet demoness


    What do you think? i think its kinda bad
     
  2. It's a little too angsty for me, but I mean that's just you. As with most stuff I read on here it's hard to find one direct theme or message, and lyrically it's a bit stumbly. Not that bad though.
     
  3. I'll second that emotion. For a stoner forum, the poetry and songwriting is all very dark and disturbed.

    I guess I'll break that cycle by posting a song of mine (chords included)

    G
    The sun rains down on an August day
    C.......................G
    There's green all around
    Am
    There's a light dew on the grass below
    .......G.............C........G
    Like diamonds on the ground

    G
    Going where the pavement ends
    C..............................G
    Not a street sign to be found
    Am
    Willow trees blowing in the breeze
    ........G..........C..........G
    Look out, I'm country-bound

    G
    So catch that highway north, baby
    C....................................G
    Come with me I'm leaving town
    Am
    Leave your phone on the bedside stand
    .........G....................C.............G
    Don't want nothing to weigh you down

    (copyright 2007 A.J.H.)
     
  4. Ah, C,G, and AM. Such deliciously chill chords.
     

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