Some of my darker poetry. this is the good stuff, or so they say.

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by GimmieMore, Apr 3, 2008.

  1. So Little Time

    I feel the urge again
    Just a little bit at a time
    But a little is all it takes
    To erase alot of time
    So many days
    Weeks
    Months
    Too much time - to stumble now
    I tell myself I can be strong
    But really - I don't know how
    Sometimes I just wanna bleed
    Sometimes I wanna force-feed
    Myself pills - they're so sweet
    Val's and vic's......
    So good to me
    But they're not
    That's just my mind
    Playing tricks on me
    So many ways to fuck up
    SO LITTLE TIME.......
     
  2. Untitled

    beautiful teardrops fall down your face
    from the pain i caused
    i open your veins to spill your life force
    you look so radiant while you die
    but i can no longer see you in the dark


    i watch you through watery vision
    but you don't see my pain
    you don't give a damn about me
    or the fact that i'm bleeding to death
    on the floor
    crying
    so beautiful
    as i die
    your reflection.....
     
  3. Done


    I'm done with you
    I'm finished
    The end
    Finito
    Finé
    I have a life to live without you
    I don't have time to play
    All these childish-ass bullshit games
    My little cousin is more serious about his fucking toy trains
    Than you ever were about me
    But thats not what you claimed
    How do you fall out of love?
    BULLSHIT!
    That's pretend
    That shit's fake
    It's not real
    Confront what really went on
    I was depressed -
    You couldn't deal
    So you went running back to this *****
    Good ol' dependable "Dj"
    You know this ***** stable
    He's broker than an unknown DJ
    He's not going anywhere
    Nobody else wants him
    But why'd he take you back?
    Just cause the other *****s taunt him?
    It doesn't matter though
    Cause you were meant to be together
    That why your FIRST relationship lasted...
    until.....
    we....
    got....
    together.....
    Hmm....
    So what exactly does that say about you?
    I know!
    You're a stupid, cheating, lying ass bitch
    And I was dumb as fuck for trusting you
    But now I've gotten smarter
    Best believe I see
    Not only is this how it is now
    This is how it will always be
    And by the way -
    Stop calling my fucking phone
    YOU AIN'T GETTING SHIT ELSE FROM ME
    And you know...
    This isn't nessecarily the way it HAD to be
    But there's one thing to remember
    BITCH
    You broke up with me
     
  4. Fuck You


    Fuck you
    Yeah that's right -
    I said it
    If you don't understand by now
    Then i guess you'll never get it
    It was never all about
    This shit
    That shit
    Him
    Her
    You
    Or me
    It was all about we
    The both of us together
    But you're the one who left
    In times of stormy weather
    I was the one with the problem
    So you took it upon yourself
    To use that as an excuse
    To put our love up on a shelf
    And yeah, at the time it hurt
    But now I'm over that shit
    I found someone who can treat me better
    So stressing over you
    It's time to quit
    And you know....
    I'm to nice to do this shit normally
    But now I'm gonna tell you like it is
    And maybe then you'll see
    I gave you everything I had
    And more if I could do it
    But after a while it didn't matter
    And you know what?
    That's how you blew it
    You made me come to realize
    To think you were true
    I should've been institutionalized
    Cause I had to be crazy
    Bitch, you played me super shady
    And you thought we could be friends?
    Squash that
    I'm fine
    YOU'RE CRAZY
    And you what?
    I'm sorry about what happened with the baby
    But you know what else?
    It wouldn't have happened if you were my lady
    Not only was it impossible
    But I didn't get you in that kinda shit
    I thought I told he was a loser
    But I guess you're too damn thick
    Not in the thighs, but in the mind
    And you must have lost your mind
    What made you not wanna be mine?
    Were you on drugs?
    Drinking too much?
    Oh wait, I remember...
    My problems were too much
    To intense
    You couldn't deal
    HOW THE FUCK WAS I SUPPOSED TO FEEL??
    It was my life that fell apart
    And instead of healing my heart
    You decided we should part
    YOU FUCKING BROKE MY HEART
    So excuse me if I come off a little rude
    I just can't believe you up and fucking left me for that dude
    I thought I told you before
    That ***** can't do shit for you
    And look at where you're standing now
    And who's standing next to you
    And before you try to dispute what I say
    FUCK THAT
    You know it's true
    Fuck your denial
    I don't have time
    That stupid bullshit ain't worth one goddamn dime
    Matter fact
    It's not worth a penny
    I've heard all your excuses
    And believe me there were plenty
    But you dropped me like I was hot
    You think I'm still trying to cater to you??
    NOT!
    You must be smoking something stronger than pot
    And that shit is making you crazy
    You might wanna stop
    And while you're at it
    Stop fucking with me
    I'm tired of your games
    I played them for too long
    It's about fucking time for that to change
    And I know this shit sounds harsh
    But this shit's straight from the heart
    I ripped out the poison dart
    That you left bleeding in my heart
    It's time for a new direction
    A clean slate
    A fresh start
    You never understood what you had with me
    But you know, I think eventually you'll see
    When you realize
    That there's nobody on this earth better than me
    Nobody's gonna cater to your bullshit like I did, see?
    I was sad at first
    Then filled with anxiety
    Now I'm glad
    FUCK THAT
    I'm motherfucking giddy
    Between the two of us....
    You lose, I win
    You'll be lost without me
     
  5. those were cool.

    i like those last two the best.

    very powerful, using direct vernacular instead of flowery beat-around-the-bush euphemisms.

    ive got some stuff i could share with you if you wanted.
     
  6. Thanks Scooby, those last two wee partof a set of 4 (Or 5 I can't remember) that I wrote after my ex broke up ith me. Anger makes me a good writer.

    I consier myself a wordsmith..... language is a passion of mine......

    I would love to read some of your poetry. Either posted or Pm'ed. I love poetry.... I love for people to critique what I write, and reading others poems can really start to inspire me.....
     
  7. I read these, came back, and read them again. The last two were pretty strong, and I feel a little bit like I can relate, seeing as my girlfriend and I just broke up.

    Sometimes maybe it's better to feel the pain and the anger and loss so that you realize how great your life truly can be when all the bullshit clears. They say you don't know what you've got til it's gone, but I believe in some relationships, the line gets blurred, and people begin to cling to the smallest of hopes within partnerships, hoping that the spark will return, or the fighting will stop. They lose sight of how happy they were while they were single, or just dating, and get caught up in all the downsides of an unhealthy relationship.

    I think that maybe you've seen the light (just maybe haha!) and now you know what your limits and expectations are. I'm a sucker for dark, deep poetry when I'm feeling blue, and I really liked these poems. Hopefully now all your poems that you post will have a lighter touch to them, as you move, and grow onwards.

    Sorry if that post was way off topic.... so, in a nut shelll, I LIKE THE POEMS!!
     
  8. Thank you for the "review" Tuxxit.

    These aren't recent. They are jut some of my favorites. And I have deeper, more depressed poetry than this. Another goo one entitled "Choice". I think I'll post it if I can fiind it already typed.
     

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