Wrote this awhile back, i was bored. Where to? His destination unknown, As modern men do He would rather condone An endless quest, leaving no answer Scampering thoughts, a treacherous cancer Endless haste, always yearning for yonder Is it a chase, or a futile wander? Deviation of instinct, reliance on the crutch He finds his soul scrambled, his essence turned to dust He lays by the window, in scattered reflection His reality is but a murky projection The moon gently rises; his frustration only grows As the wind softly whistles, his tired eyes close feel free to give me some feedback
Like whoeverthefuckthatIcan'tremember'snameuptheresaid, it's really good. I've been rapping for a long time and doing spoken word and seen a whole lot of writinh and it's very rare to come across someone who writes so well, imo. With a few minor tweaks or just some creative delivery, you could turn this into a pretty damn good spoken word piece I reckon.
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