rate my rap

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by kushkrusher, Nov 8, 2008.

  1. i know this is nothing amazing or anything but check it out , tell me what you think


    My moms fuckin crazy and my dad has gone mad,
    So Becky get your suit case and pack your bag,
    I gotta go cause I'm bout to flip,
    Baby lets go were takin a trip,
    We'll leave to the mountains at a quarter to six.

    Away from electronics and world possessions
    Its been 30 minutes since we ate our fungi collections,
    Lets get out this campsite looks pretty fair,
    Set camp and sit in our lawn chair,
    Peace and quiet away from the crowds
    Relaxing looking into the clouds,
    Ah the sun, the trees,
    The sky, the breeze,
    I sit with ease everything is so immense
    As I ponder my mind everything starts to make sense
    As I sit back and hear the chirp of a canary
    Away from the world in my sanctuary,
    This is great we should of gone fishing
    I knew these mushrooms would help my nutrition,
    So I sit and watch the sun set with my future wife
    As I reminisce and whisper to the wind I love my life.


    Ah the fire it flows, the birds they sing,
    The wind the scents the happiness it brings
    The seeds in the air that turn into flowers
    I sit watching nature for hours
    I watch the beetles and mesquites
    Baby please pass the Fritos
    I love being alone not a person for thousands of meters
    Away from homos and gays
    Away from radio waves
    Away from all the lights and cars
    To the only place I can see the stars.
    I evolve myself like a caterpillar in a cocoon
    My natural surroundings staring into the moon
    I see the patterns of how everyone lives alike
    I brake through independently I love my life.

    I close my eyes; we need to do this again,
    As I lose track of time and start to spin,
    I cant speak I feel out of place,
    Something might be wrong or I'm shit faced,
    The speakers start to emit smoke till its so polluted you cant breath
    And a cage falls around the city so no one can leave
    The vents open and push out poisonous fumes,
    They die one by one and are put into tombs,
    I try to run but there are surveillance cameras in the branches
    Poison drips from the leaves,
    Cord outlets in all the trees.
    How can this be?
    All I wants to run free
    I turn to the shadows to see
    A 6 foot figure named reality
    It was to dark to get his description
    But he spoke with good diction and holding a knife,
    The creature grunted "you will not love your life."

    Four little words but mean so much,
    I turn around and sprint in a rush
    Despising his voice and the words that he spit,
    I'll run for my life and never quit.
    I mysteriously tripped and looked to my side
    The figure stood strong to my left with very much pride
    Ah reality, its red glowing eyes its sharp long fangs,
    It picks me up and bite into my veins,
    This monster gonna win how can this be
    I use all of my strength till it lets me free
    He frightened me more than a black man with a gun
    So I covered my wounds and started to run,
    The shadow knows that I am weak and his jobs almost done,
    As he shouted the phrase that had been said before,
    Chasing me with intentions to make me no more,
    He caught me I knew I'd never live to see my daughter
    I'd be killed by a dementor from harry potter,
    It sucks my life from me till everything turns to black
    I slowly pass out and state the cliché
    As I look past his right to see a sun ray
    And as it comes down the beast turns around
    Blinded by glory blinded by light
    Mother Nature herself approaches ready to fight,
    I can't remember it all I was in a haze
    Stunned the miracle left me in amaze
    The shadows plans fell he could no longer feast
    As Mother Nature swung and obliterated the beast
    I opened my eyes with Mother Nature in the light
    She revived me with water that tasted like sprite
    As I had a vision of the love in my life
    The day of my night, the joy of my pain, my ying and my yang
    The all natural that keeps me going
    The reality in the wind and how hard it be blowing


    so i stay restin
    learning lifes lessons

    I love what I love with all of my might
    So until Armageddon I'll be loving my life….

    Now that's the end of the story and if you don't get it
    Find what you love and run the fuck with it!
     
  2. Its decent i enjoyd reading it.
     
  3. This is a poem, not a rap lol :smoking:, but it rhymes and tells a story, so it's pretty good :hello:
     
  4. i thought it was pretty fuckin sick
     

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