Each contestant has 24 hours to check in, once both opponents have checked in, they have 24 hours to drop their verses. Remember the rules, 16 bars/16 lines!!! Questions, just ask refer to the original thread which I provided a link to below. Once both verses have been dropped, voting will ensue for 24 hours, then the winner will be decided. Good luck! When writing your verses consider the following: NO FEEDING/FLIPPING NO RECYCLING NO SWAYING NO BITING Any questions on the definitions of the rules, see the original 'Rap Battle Tournament' Thread in the link above. In order for your vote to count you must leave an explanation as to why you voted the way you did, otherwise your vote will not be counted. You cannot vote for yourself, either. PuffPuffHOLD: Im the cookie monster, what the fuck is this johnny cash kid Doing in the trash bin, oh wait, he's a bitch ass deadbeat has been, Trynna learn the rules of rhyming, im a tutor and for you it's charge free, I can work on kids below poverty, and form origami's, with “johnny cash‘s†schemes of selling his shitty rap spits to children, What's your plan? To kill them?, Strike illness in them?, im in to spill reigns Of an intelligent brain, I do this with mild thinking, leaving you paralyzed and sedentary In my imaginary penitentiary, quit it with pessimistic feelings, bet against me, After all you might win a tourny, im kidding, can automated byes Really take you so far without a rhyme?, I predict you fall out by late night, Then say I saw “eight mileâ€, he said if I believe I will succeed, YO “cash†you can suck these, Get on those knees and scrub my floor please, it's the job for the rap ducklings, But soon ima outsource to oversea countries, get the job done is my motto, So if you wanna come again in another thread I'll leave you dead, im on dope, But hustle faster then a cons growing debt, let me just say NEXT, “cash†come again, Cause reading your shit is leaving me brain dead, like cavemen, my lectures done, AMEN! VS Johnny Cash: I might be new to this, you might call me a rookie. I'm like a greedy bhuddist, steady stacking them rupees. Look at how I do this, steady whacking you groupies. I put roofies in cookies for you loosie Lucy's. That's enough for the bragging that ain't who I am. I don't keep my pants saggin and I ain't shootin, fam. But I don't talk to police, lips closed like John Gotti. You're sucking pig weiner, steady eating that salami. Now for the last half best believe it'll be the best half. Listen the last laugh is something that I always must have. Before you talk to me, whipe that cum off your mustache. Keep your shemale close FEMA might come to evacuate her. Cause even your hands got AIDS, obsessive masturbator. Fam I know you do the times table of one, on a calculator. Pushin buttons on a phone booth, thinking it's an elevator. On a fishing boat, throwin 'em back like “catch ya later.â€
I might be new to this, you might call me a rookie. I'm like a greedy bhuddist, steady stacking them rupees. Look at how I do this, steady whacking you groupies. I put roofies in cookies for you loosie Lucy's. That's enough for the bragging that ain't who I am. I don't keep my pants saggin and I ain't shootin, fam. But I don't talk to police, lips closed like John Gotti. You're sucking pig weiner, steady eating that salami. Now for the last half best believe it'll be the best half. Listen the last laugh is something that I always must have. Before you talk to me, whipe that cum off your mustache. Keep your shemale close FEMA might come to evacuate her. Cause even your hands got AIDS, obsessive masturbator. Fam I know you do the times table of one, on a calculator. Pushin buttons on a phone booth, thinking it's an elevator. On a fishing boat, throwin 'em back like “catch ya later.” please people remember this: "In order for your vote to count you must leave an explanation as to why you voted the way you did, otherwise your vote will not be counted." Not so much because I care about lost votes so much but because I want constructive criticism.
Im the cookie monster, what the fuck is this johnny cash kid Doing in the trash bin, oh wait, he's a bitch ass deadbeat has been, Trynna learn the rules of rhyming, im a tutor and for you it's charge free, I can work on kids below poverty, and form origami's, with “johnny cash‘s†schemes of selling his shitty rap spits to children, What's your plan? To kill them?, Strike illness in them?, im in to spill reigns Of an intelligent brain, I do this with mild thinking, leaving you paralyzed and sedentary In my imaginary penitentiary, quit it with pessimistic feelings, bet against me, After all you might win a tourny, im kidding, can automated byes Really take you so far without a rhyme?, I predict you fall out by late night, Then say I saw “eight mileâ€, he said if I believe I will succeed, YO “cash†you can suck these, Get on those knees and scrub my floor please, it's the job for the rap ducklings, But soon ima outsource to oversea countries, get the job done is my motto, So if you wanna come again in another thread I'll leave you dead, im on dope, But hustle faster then a cons growing debt, let me just say NEXT, “cash†come again, Cause reading your shit is leaving me brain dead, like cavemen, my lectures done, AMEN! goodluck
As far as punches and humor goes, PPH took that part pretty easily as far as I'm concerned. Johnny had some decent ones, but they just didn't really string together, seemed a bit more erratic. Same goes for the flow, it's a different rhyme scheme that PPH uses, but I was able to pick up on it pretty quickly, used some nice multi's... "Trynna learn the rules of rhyming, im a tutor and for you it's charge free, I can work on kids below poverty, and form origami's," While it may not be the best punch, I like the rhyme you used. The best punch in the battle goes to PPH as well... "After all you might win a tourny, im kidding, can automated byes Really take you so far without a rhyme?, I predict you fall out by late night," No hate on Johnny, for a beginning it wasn't bad, work on your multi's some and just try and build a more fluid read, don't break it down bar by bar, think of it as one run on sentence so to speak. keep writing! +1 PuffPuffHOLD
+1 for Puff. Doper flow, and his last bar had me shaking my head. Something like "Brain dead like cavemen, shit's done AMEN". Dope! Johnny had decent lines, but they weren't the greatest. When it comes down to it, I felt like Puff overall had my attention more.
I'm going to have to go with Johnny Cash on this one. I just couldn't put PPH's lyrics' into a good rythem inside of my head, but Cash's seemed to flow nicely. Overall I think Cash has my vote.
Both verses had their shining moments, but overall Puff had the better multies, punches and content. Johnny had nice flow but he needs to take a little time to come up with some really hard-hitting content, since I can see the potential is there. Work on the multies and creative punches a little more. Good battle. +1 Puff
word i agree with everyone, Johnny's got mad potential, but i feel like Puff addressed the 'battle' side of this a bit more. +1 PuffPuffHOLD
Fuck it I vote for you too puff, haha yours was better... plain and simple But I think I did pretty well for my first time, got some good feedback too Youll definately see me again next tournament
yo, just cause I've seen you around most of today Johnny, you should vote for the other match up's as well, the more votes the better
if you really want to improve and get some feedback, only doing tourny's isn't going to cut it. hop into the rap battle thread, or the post your verse thread. there's a lot of helpful people lurking around you just have to look.
I might have to look at this another day. Leaning toward Puff because of consistency but not sure. Def sick verse though for a first timer Cash. Cocaine Blues all day lol
Puff, youre gettin better quick homie. Johnny.. keep it up son hit up the battle thread and shit. you're a lot better than i was when i started writin raps! but this one goes to Puff for me