Two things: 1. I am by no stretch of the imagination a rock singer. 2. The ending note is supposed to be an F4, but my voice is tired so I dropped it to an E4, which is why it sounds weird at the end. Anyways, let me know what you think: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mW1nJPkkhKQ&feature=youtu.be
Do you play guitar? With a voice, playing guitar would get you mad laid. Well done, mate. Keep it up.