Untitled, I wrote the first 3 lines tripping on mushrooms and finished it the next day. I am not to be seen, nor heard, smelled nor tasted but to be felt without senses, above delusion of human perception peel my skin like dry paint off a canvas, for art is not eternal nor immortal, it is bound to its creator And I am the generator, fueling the minds of luminous teenagers, chaotic like airplane propellers splattered with clay, a sculpture that spans the length of a curved runway, And here lies point A telling how to begin but not where, why, with whom or when, for the end lies on the horizon I am your ticket, your pass on the bus that pulsates and bubbles with pus alive as you and the rest of us steady customers, but not them, stable and sane, with sanitized brains in the shapes of tetrahedrons, pointed like weapons, legions marching in straight lines of reason, while we roll along like the cycle of seasons
nice man. I just mentally rapped that poem in my mind and it sounded pretty sweet(I was listening to Rutten by Skream). Put a nice beat behind those words and you got yourself an awesome original rap!
Thanks, I also took a lot of inspiration from The Electric Cool-Aid Acid Test... The most obvious being the bus metaphor.
great poem man. i really enjoyed the second stanza 'And I am the generator, fueling the minds of luminous teenagers, chaotic like airplane propellers splattered with clay, a sculpture that spans the length of a curved runway'. sick This may sound random but iv been meaning to read The Electric Cool-Aid Acid Test and haven't gotten round to it. how is it? keep up that poetry man
Thanks, that was one of my favorite parts to. The book is amazing! A great social documentary of the 1960's psychedelic movement, but told through the perspective of the craziest, most hardcore acid trippers to ever exist! But they're not freaks, because they're all really intelligent(The leader is the author of "One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest") and can handle that much mental stimulation. They don't have to work because they just live off of the money Kesey is making from is award winning book and play. But there's some twists and I won't say anything, but it's also got some great descriptions of the acid tests that they ran all around the country, and of the acid trips themselves. Anyway, I definitely reccomend it if you're into that culture.
shit, i had to come back to your thread and read it again! and im still diggin it! can we expect some more work?
Maybe, I write lyrics for my band and a lot of them are strong enough to be poems, but I might end up just posting some more like this one once I finish this other project I'm working on.
i agree. sound like some shit aesop rock would rap about. i like it. if my rep counted for shit id +rep you. would like to hear another in the future.
i'm not really big into poetry...but i i could find more stuff like this it would definitely change my mind. i have to admit dude, that was awesome
I verify this poem's awesomeness. I hate to boost people's ego's but I can tell you already lost yours at least once. Great job dude.