Poetry 101

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by .ViciouS., Nov 21, 2006.

  1. I got an idea since I've been seeing a lot of people post poems only to get lost in all the threads in this section, so maybe if you wanted to at any time you feel inspired just post in this thread. :hello:

    And of course share any other work that you have done, I love reading poetry no matter the subject. As for me I'd love to discuss poems and the vibe I get from reading them, so if you got something to say go ahead, no fear, we're all adults here. :)

    I'm not giving this one any title, it really could mean anything:

    If at any time you reminisce,
    then at least remember this,
    the memory of that moment you exist,
    to jump off a cliff without a parachute to glide,
    as your intent was to soar high and fly,
    but dropped like a rock that proceeded into a dive,
    all you could do was look up top, you fret, to stop,
    when the whole time you could of just looked straight and walked.


    An older one I posted already:

    FOREVER AND NEVER
    Spheres of light shine bright
    Fire laid out in the sky
    The sun shares its last rays
    One not seen in many days
    A group of birds soars high
    Not a chance to let this go by
    A view that borders ecstasy
    And here you sit next to me
    So glad I'd rather share this sight
    Than sit here alone tonight

    Time stops but lips move
    Fears and anxieties soothed
    Past calamities never seemed so smooth
    While we wait, wait so long to choose
    The future we no longer wish to prove
    Transcend the stars, soar to infinite
    We do this all so well
    While not taking life so seriously

    For now we stare into the diamonds of the sky
    Cherish the cool night as a means to get by
    But not to waste time but to embellish it
    Chill with nature while it still has merit
    Because we've realized what we love falls apart bit by bit
    Each night a jewel falls off the sky, a tool that fell behind
    Dimmer and dimmer sights fail to shimmer
    The line of tolerance grows thinner

    By now its dark, but not in our hearts
    Illuminating within, we have from the start
    Internal love to suppress our rage
    While we take part on this everchanging stage
    Not as an actor but as a factor
    In the book of life we'll write atleast one chapter
    One full of joy that fills voids with laughter
    Living to experience the things that matter
     
  2. Most people gather friends to sit around and get wasted,
    I find it boring to get shit faced and act abrasive,
    I rather get high, get buds that seems laced
    to the point where you can almost taste it,
    But lets face it, it's all d9thc, you can see mine, no heresy,
    I don't let it get the best of me
    And i'll still act all fine and true, no lies,
    Why don't you try it on for size,
    I'll guarantee that it'll light up your eyes,
    your mind will be mezmerized, no doubt
    since i started i've loved life and all the green in it,
    above strive, my dreams seem to trasncend infinite,
    If this is a game I'm here to win it, while
    enjoying all the things that amuse me, and no I don't let bud abuse me,
    like most people assume to see,
    those who use it in their favor know that it's got their back, infact since we overcome
    this feat, we'll be wiser, true that,
    and no one will stop me for my decisions are my own,
    I harm no one while blazing in my home,
    It doesn't make me a terrorist or cause me to see a therapist,
    I want to be set free and this path that i follow is sure to stress me,
    But I know i'll be alright because I always got buddha to bless me.
     
  3. My old highschool "philosophy of life" paper, except I wrote it in poetry form with consent from my teacher.

    SHINE ON
    One life, one mind to find what I seek, undefined,
    I waited for a sign, it took many years to realize it will never
    find me, astounded, my life had passed before my eyes,
    no rewind to bring back time,

    Present 1999,
    I became at face to face to my first major mistake,
    I grew to be best friends with someone fake,
    It cost me $300 to make him show his true weight, misguided,

    Fortunately,
    I learned much, was quick to move on though the past clung on,
    But always learning from wrong is what builds me up strong,
    Appreciating what I have now, not when its gone,
    and the freedom to choose what you should do, since life's at stake,
    Its underlying source split in two, good and evil,
    Mother nature and human corruption,
    I placed myself in both factions,
    Fact is, nature overwhelmed me with glee,
    So I shall forever helm myself in its plea,
    And explain that in it, it will provide all that we need,
    A seed that's bound to grow,
    But up to us people, to decide its flow,
    In due course,
    Greed is more often sought, some plot money over life,
    Continuing on the strife, the easy way out
    Some assume then that life is worth cash, determined at last that your chip stack must be at mass with a king's stash, deceit,
    Uncommonly known that to succeed will not strictly be achieved through fame or fortune,
    It's whatever you believe in to give you reason to find that life,
    Is not worthless if you find your own purpose,
    For me,
    A positive entity, one full of bliss, so I try to express myself to those close with thoughtfulness,
    Because without true friends, even righteous minds descend into dead ends,
    So I stay forever keen to be aware at all times, through bad to fair, because if I never expect it to be over, change will strike, seen as an illusive cobra,
    But my experiences, true sight, beams eternal supernova,
    Illuminate, to guide the ride that I must face in dark flight,
    Wont stop for bait, mines designed to degrade my mind, I will shine on,
    Mindset upon spreading knowledge, no frolic, truth fed but always close to contemplate,
    Is it right for you?
    The decision is yours, but I can guarantee that the truth will at times hurt,
    But I believe once your eyes can fully see, you will feel the essence of no constraint,
    The presence of being untainted is sure to be forever told, and with this you can become the change you seek in the world that lay at your feet, ready to unfold,
    So when I die, as long as I know that I strived for a high that soars way past blue skies, will be unique to me,
    Then no regret shall linger, through my rise to overcome lies, to find
    I conquered a peak yet to be,
    The word impossible dissolved, my mind to end completely in resolve, evolved,
    And the world, it remains to be yours,
    Golden, if you stay true to your source,
    The force pursuing to resonate the fact,
    That all people are equal and chances of a sequel, unreliable,
    But undeniable that,
    Life is wealth,
    Although seemingly stealth,
    You always have choice,
    The one voice, through thick and thin,
    The time is now for it to begin.



    And a couple of other old poems;

    Sometimes people often search for where grace is,
    Faith bellows in the hearts of many races in different places,
    Forgotten, that where you need to search is within the mind,
    And find, that if one thing mattered after inevitable death,
    Is the irreplacable experience before one's last breathe,

    So the question of all this wonder comes out to this,
    Is regretting something you experienced worse than not?
    Sounds of time hold only a dime for life to reminisce,
    But one full of bliss is is worth more than time has got,
    Being free from all of the constraints placed on thought.
    ----
    Envision the world as placid energy of endless streams,
    Imagine spheres of ecstactic colors only seen within dreams,
    Collision after collision of beings flying contortedly with glee,
    Within these frivolous scenes you can take part of the world i see.
     
  4. I think this is a great idea. Nice work, by the way.;)

    I've got a little to add:

    The World in a Saucer
    A momentary aurora of light
    Blinding the eyes
    Of a lonely heart
    And piercing the silence
    Which slithers on the
    Crimson atmosphere
    Leaving thorough
    Paradigms and cliches
    On the surface of
    The faded leaves
    Of memories
    Spiraling parallel
    Between a thought
    And a Broken life
    Is a decorum gesture
    Merely of relation
    To the attention
    Given in a polished
    Shed of eye-lining
    Blood droplets
    And draperies?
    Such Immaculate tears
    Trapped in dreams
    Reminisce of
    open-handed
    Late-October Sadness
    Of my wondering
    Mystic lady-friend
    Mourning(morning)
    Along leaflets
    Binding to the
    River's outskirt
     
  5. THE JUNE GRASS


    How does the sun go down?
    I am writhing in the ground\t
    I am buried in a mound - tell me!
    How does the earth go ‘round?

    Why do the morning birds cry?\t
    I need silence once in awhile
    It drives me wild - tell me!
    Why does the June grass die?\t

    When snow flakes cover this hill\t
    (‘Though the world is just a window sill\t
    That looks out on an eye) then \t
    The universe is but a bitter pill

    Where is the spring’s breeze sprite?\t
    And the wood nymphs glowing at night?
    I am writhing in my mound - tell me!\t
    Why has the June grass died?\t





    RED ROSE



    Where does your garden grow?
    I was just so bored today
    Home where a willow flows

    How could you feel dandy?
    Oh, how a red rose grows
    Slow and thorny till it snows\t

    Does some fellow show \t
    All he ever knows?
    Flowers and candy I suppose

    Oh, how a red rose grows\t
    Slow - and thirty by the time it knows\t
    Home where I, mellow, grow
     
  6. roses are red and violets are blue
    my plants are growin like its the thing to do
    i hope they make it to a pound and a half
    but thats wishfull thinking so ill go get smashed
    hey its me and now i am toasted
    wont u join me then we can get roasted!
    pooooooooooooooooooooooooooooot!!!!
     
  7. ^ my fav poem ever.
     
  8. the earth refuses to leave a footstep, it has no mind to do so
    Even if i walked this path
    knowing nothing of what is ahead of me
    eyes in the back of my head
    grow tired of the repeated scenes

    take a left, take a right
    now im back to where i've always been
    my mind is restless as the wind bats the trees
    the ground my feet stand on looks bleak to me
    yet i can't think of another place i'd rather be

    my surroundings altogether sits so serenely
    burning deep within planting seeds of desire
    only to grow into fiery starlights

    oh, so distant and far
    i tried to grab ahold of it
    the river that runs through it

    the harder i tried, the less i had control

    only to now realize
    when i let go
    i could change the flow
    and eventually

    the flow would run through me

    as it will for you.
     


  9. that's great, used poetic convention without sounding forced. lovely stuff. keep up the good work.
     
  10. we slow time...
    to watch clouds float westward
    to sneak tokes
    on china town roof-tops.
    we sneak tokes
    to gaze down...
    town,
    where they hustle like ants [eating ants]
    but they don't know...
    the sun is setting
    on the business district.

    -Oso Green

    it needs some work, but i like the initial idea. it's just a toking rant bout money and business and all that crap that complicates our lives. true story, too. went to L.A. friday, riding the subways with a friend, smoking at every stop.
    : ]

    peace


    p.s. honest, constructive criticism would be appreciated! seriously, i'd rather hear it sucks, and why it sucks then "it's good" and no reason. i want to become a better writer! i have some non-fiction too, essays on things.


    and anyy suggestions for a title???


    oh yea, and you're right, vicious. poems just get lost in the artists' corner.
     
  11. there was recently a school shooting near me. this isnt great but i dc


    STOP lieing STOP hiding STOP all the fucking violence STOP- Materialism and STOP- all the fighting--- Stop and treat a girl like a motherfucking woman and i bet you you would care if you knew 'em.
    Self absorbance is our problem and violence not the answer.. so think before you tell em put they hands up.
    Think before you call that silly harmless little name and insecurity is not the one to blame.
    Its people behind it all
    we slowly break eachother down
    until theres 32 victims on the ground.
     



  12. you blither. quit it. i agree with you, but you blither incoherently. and your swearing seems...trite. sorry, all things i'm sure a lot of us have strong feelings against, but...yea.

    edit: on second thought, it's okay. i didnt realize it was a poem? lacks focus, form. maybe try editing it, make it more well thought out.
     
  13. Risen<o:p></o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    In a dead forest, I found myself alone
    Dimmed from the moonlight of the red, winter sky
    Blind sided by the colorless snow
    And wrapped with old, seasoned trees
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Holding my breath for good and bad
    I'm lost in my annoyed thoughts that grind my teeth
    Anger turned into sadness which turned into tearless cries
    Not knowing which direction I will fall, I wait
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Clouds hid the moon, snow cried to the ground
    Wind blew the branches that made rhythmical waves
    And in the distance of the hidden, crooked path
    Came a white glow from the unknown darkness
    <o:p> </o:p>
    A beautiful girl in a gown approached upon the night
    Long, blonde, snow flaked covered hair
    Hard crystal iced blue eyes with a hint of Satan
    And her lips were formed to a soft pink smile
    <o:p> </o:p>
    She stood in place and held out her hand
    Without thought, I gave her the reach of my fingers
    But not knowing, I gave her my frost bitten heart
    And with a jolt that leads to an awkward comfort, I gave her my soul
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Falling to my knees, I looked into her with a strange sense of fear
    She rose my chin and kissed my hard, pressed lips
    And without a feeling of guilt, I left this torched world of mine
    Tonight, a demon has risen above all, and all has forgotten
     
  14. uh sry, idk whats up with the smiley face bullshit. i jsut copied and pasted from microsoft word.
     
  15. Immune <o:p></o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Head rush processin'
    My chest is caving in
    Can you give me a high?
    <o:p> </o:p>
    I'm here ‘n' all alone
    My pain can't be shown
    Can't you hear me screaming?
    <o:p> </o:p>
    In the bottom of your heart
    Stopped from the start
    Blind and deaf in your head
    <o:p> </o:p>
    And I don't ask you why
    You're just gunna lie
    Tell yourself otherwise
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Never let the lies burn your eyes
    Let the truth rot in your mind
    Don't deny the facts of your life
    You're immune to everything
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    I know you cannot see
    Someone please shoot me
    Head falls dead to the floor
    <o:p> </o:p>
    So go and get so high
    Let the time fly by
    Hold your breath ‘til you die
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Never let the lies burn your eyes
    Let the truth rot in your mind
    Don't deny the facts of your life
    You're immune to everything
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Take a hit, fly and be free
    This is no trip, this is reality
    Broke on your ass, beg on your knees
    This is your life, this is reality
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Never let the lies burn your eyes
    Let the truth rot in your mind
    Don't deny the facts of your life
    You're immune to everything
     
  16. wow these smiley faces really ruin the feelings of my songs. lol oh well.


    <o:p> </o:p>
    With your tongue coiled around my throat
    Dark shadows come out of you
    My last gasp of your bitter breath
    This is the hell you bring me to
    <o:p> </o:p>
    And while I rotted in my corners
    I have found my rest upon
    The fallen leaves of autumn
    This cold has shown what you've become
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Laughter only covers up my true feelings
    I have to leave but I don’t know where to go
    Kiss me the last time before I say good bye
    I’ll see you again but really, I don’t know
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    With every raindrop breaking a sound
    Making a slight rhythm to my thoughts
    I have fallen in my dark puddles again
    In my black swamp lies, I am lost
    <o:p> </o:p>
    And with this faith you've brought to me
    I've walked through your forest of cries
    Feeling a strange comfort to me
    I am here until forever dies
    <o:p> </o:p>
    <o:p> </o:p>
    Laughter only covers up my true feelings
    I have to leave but I don’t know where to go
    Kiss me the last time before I say good bye
    I’ll see you again but really, I don’t know

    btw this song is called 'Beauty in the Fall'
     
  17. I liked that one dude.
     

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