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one of my poems...

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by Girlz2Disrupted, May 16, 2003.

  1. #1 Girlz2Disrupted, May 16, 2003
    actually a collection of formal cinquains...


    begin to end...then begin again

    I
    lover
    let's romp like cats
    experience my heat
    join me in pleasures unsurpassed
    touch me

    II
    Beauty
    is the vision
    of a romantic mist
    and a girl moving through the trees
    crying

    III
    Silence
    words are useless
    they can only cause harm
    all I ever wanted was you
    don't talk

    IV
    That guy
    I loved him so
    I was a pawn to him
    happily opening my heart
    tear drops

    V
    My heart
    cannot stand this
    you covered up your face
    and wooed me with a mask so sweet
    crushing

    VI
    Do you
    understand pain
    gut wrenching, screaming pain
    gaze into the pools of my eyes
    see it?

    VII
    He is
    a fresh bandage
    'round this...my trampled heart
    slowly healing what's hiding there
    kindness



    ----------------------------------------------------------------------follows the rise and fall of my first love...and the beginning of my second...
     
  2. #2 ubik, May 22, 2003
    I
    Lover.
    Not a fool but an blinded one.
    Blinded by light.
    Burned by time.

    II
    Beauty.
    Harbour that I found.
    Curtains that kept me from seeing outside.

    III
    Silence.
    Did not speak.
    Did not ask.

    IV
    That guy.
    An cross road.
    You went left.
    I stood still.

    V
    My heart.
    I keep it in a jar.
    I show it around.
    I throw it away.

    VI
    Do you.
    Like flowers and sweets.
    Chain yourself to the wall
    Live fast and die young.

    VII
    He is.
    An escort.
    A boat?
    you're ticket away?
     
  3. #3 smokin&tokin, May 23, 2003
    lol i like that.................... good shit!?!?
     
  4. #4 Girlz2Disrupted, May 24, 2003

    i liked this...very nice...
     
  5. #5 ubik, May 24, 2003
    Your stuff was so nice that I decided to do an "opposite" version of it.
     
  6. #6 Girlz2Disrupted, May 28, 2003

    and it worked...and you know what...some of your takes are dead on too...you are good...a good writer will always touch on the hurts and needs common to us all...
     
  7. #7 ubik, May 28, 2003
    so sweet, thanks for your kind words....


    I'm sorry, me is very off the line at the moment....

    Some may laugh some cry, but at the end we all will die.
     

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