my poem. tell me how u feel about it

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by tetoleetd, Apr 26, 2011.

  1. Poems the bees fucking knees! I like your poem man, keep writing! I want to see your work grow.
     
  2. ok can you wite a poem for us here
     
  3. and can we make suggestions
     

  4. no I was dead serious haha.

    This is what I consider poetry.

    The Passionate Shepherd to His Love
    -Christopher Marlowe, 1599.

    [SIZE=-1]Come live with me and be my love,[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]And we will all the pleasures prove[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]That valleys, groves, hills, and fields[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Woods or steepy mountain yields[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]And we will sit upon the rocks,[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Seeing the shepherds feed their flocks[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]By shallow rivers to whose falls[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Melodious birds sing madrigals.[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]And I will make thee beds of roses[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]And a thousand fragrant posies,[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]A cap of flower, and a kirtle[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Embroidered all with leaves of myrtle;[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]A gown made of the finest wool[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Which from our pretty lambs we pull;[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Fair lined slippers for the cold[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]With buckles of the purest gold;[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]A belt of straw and ivy buds,[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]With coral clasps and amber studs;[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]And if these pleasures may thee move,[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Come live with me and be my love.[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]The shepherds' swains shall dance and sing[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]For thy delight each May morning:[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]If these delights thy mind may move,[/SIZE]
    [SIZE=-1]Then live with me and be my love.[/SIZE]
     
  5. that was pretty fucking good but what the fucks a madrigal?

    anyway your cheating, write your own
     

  6. not my style my man. if you like that style then thats fine. i dont try to be artsy and sound like im from 16th century england.

    i try to go by this motto : the words that make it complicated never get congratulated. in other words, if you want to connect with people you have to speak from the heart and do it in a simplistic manner.

    a lot of the best art, whether its music, poetry or visual art, is very simple.
     
  7. I like it, the emotion has tangibility; I had to read the whole thing, regardless of if I hadnt cared to finish it. Pretty interesting
     

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