What do you expect man? you lay day down four cliche poetry lines and expect a bunch of rep and praise? I dunno what to tell you dude.
cliche? cool. i never thought it was that worthy. if you're looking at the lines each individually, you're missing the point, the concept, the logos. edit, ps, i'm a vetran tripper. i know better than to expect.
I don't mean to antagonize, but you say i'm not looking at the poem as a whole? of course I am, it can be understood immediately, there is no depth. And the fact that you do a lot of drugs doesn't justify how you act as if you have some ultimate wisdom that I really can't understand, or maybe i don't all together, who knows.
Wow, honestly no 4 stanzas have made me think about something as much as those have. No joke, can't believe it slipped past me last year..
though you do quite well. there is depth of meaning in all, dude. but seriously, the depth comes when considering the implications of this. ... or maybe you're just coming at it from somewhere that such concepts are comon sense and taken for granted... idk, that would be nice, but i see little to corroborate that hypothesis. i dont do a lot of drugs. the fact that you state such justifies my stance of thinking you're not seeing the whole jigsaw. I only said i was a vetran tripper. that was in no way ment to imply i chug loads of drugs. i've had a few trips and taken my consciousness to places less comonly accessed. i made no allusions to a claim to some "ultimate wisdom" you dont have. i only mentioned that i was a vetran tripper to explain where i got my understanding of "non-expectation". frankly [and exaggeratedly for sensationalism's sake], the way you interpret my words i find ugly and almost offensive to the human species. Lighten up. yay, job done, intent met. catalyst for thought. thnx very much. (unless yer being sarcastic, ~ heh, sorry, got a little defensive from writing my reply to Chrysatroll )
Well I just had a massive response typed out, but I was looking at it and I said to myself, "What's the point?". End result - I don't care enough anymore.
aw. i care. (nah really, i was lookin forward to readin yer reply) oh well... yer meta gawd will likely slap you about since you dont care anymore. i hope you like "wrathfull and gloomy". lol
woah crazy, i literally haven't been on the forum in months, and here we are again, haha. whatever ill suck it up its your poetry good job.
n coz some folks cant seem to hear the possitive message with the full pwer it can yeild, i present an alternative. If you are god, and god is you, if you are a vindictive, jealous jerk who won't brok an insult to his ego, then guess who looks like that too. *prod, prod, poke!* inspired by this post http://forum.grasscity.com/spirituality-philosophy/234947-i-blashpeme-blaaaspheeemerr.html
Some folks simply are reluctant to take anyone seriously who after 14 lines has the stones to refer to themselves as a genius. 10 year olds have turned out works that are more eloquent and meaningful. However if writing that makes you happy and you wanna share it, by all means, knock yourself out. But if you wanna call yourself a genius, don't expect anyone else to be impressed.