Me and my friends rap song about Smoking Weed - PLEASE LEAVE FEEDBACK!

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by Dylan Dude, Oct 26, 2011.

  1. #1 Dylan Dude, Oct 26, 2011
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    Me and my friend Matt Z recorded this. I'm on the 1st and 3rd verses, he's on the 2nd and 4th and chorus. And I made the beat. Please take a listen and let me know what you guys think :) thanks
    [ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I1YvazovZVc]608 Boyz - How We Do It - YouTube[/ame]
     
  2. Man this sucks...
    You dont smoke an ounce a day, if you passed out while walking from Just WEED?? what would you do on some gudda s hit
     
  3. Rap Food Chain:

    Dr. Dre > Snoop Dogg > Slug > KRS-ONE > MC Hammer > T-Pain > Lil Wayne > Justin Bieber > 608 Boyz
     
  4. #4 psychoperson25, Oct 26, 2011
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    Did you rhyme lot with lot?

    Also I liked the beat it was decent.
     
  5. man why the hate? Were just having fun trying to rap. And fyi i have passed out while super baked one time right after i stood up

    man i never said we were better than any of those people no need to compare just listen to it


    Did you guys listen to the whole song? I thought my verse from 2:28 to 3:12 was pretty nice :confused: chorus was pretty simple and exagrerated but its catchy. Were some brand new rappers btw this is our second song. How are we supposed to be better than them if they've had way more practice?
     
  6. Dude, honestly. Work on your rhymes. You can probably be way better than what was in that song, and try to work on not being so monotone. Good effort, though! Love seeing amateur musicians trying to get they're name out. Keep it up!
     
  7. thanks for listening man
     
  8. Dude, I just want to say that I was in a bit of a shitty mood last night, and while I have the right to my own opinion I shouldn't have expressed myself in that way. I'm truly sorry and regret speaking to you like that, it was horrible and offensive.

    The reason I don't like it that much is because it sounds like two teenagers trying to come across as stoney as possible. You definitely aren't the worst rappers, but you are far from the best. I know you're new to rapping and I respect that, but there's simply no conviction in your song. Putting some real aggression and even emotion into it would make your flows pretty damn decent.

    Another minor niggle is with the backing track. It only just sounds better than a MIDI track, and even then I find it very generic. I understand that this is something rather subjective though.

    And you can practice; record your rhymes but only show them to your friends and other close acquaintances; they can give you the necessary criticism and then you can make your music public when you feel that you've sufficiently improved. This will make listeners think that you're talented from the get go and so they'll follow you, even though you may have been practicing for the last 9 months.

    I hope that clears things up, and once again I'm so sorry for the way I spoke to you. :)
     
  9. yeah i could see how you would get that feeling from it. Thanks for the feedback man :) We will only get better from here.
     
  10. man, im not trying to be a dick but...just dont quit your day job..yall just aint got a rapper voice

    OR it could just be the northern accent throwing me off idk
     
  11. haha where you from? And no i will not be quitting my day job to become a rapper. I'm not too serious about rapping. More into making beats but with the unlimited amount of beats i have i thought it'd be fun to rap. And it is lol
     
  12. not too bad but your vocals are too loud mix that shit better to blend..also you're doing the "cat in the hat" rhymes...try to not be so predictable and switch up your flow every few sentences
     
  13. thanks for the feedback man. :) I wish i had some good monitor speakers to mix with but i don't. I thought it sounded good but i hate mixing. My 2nd verse switched up the flow alot near the end
     
  14. While its not terrible, I didn't dig it too much personally.

    I do have a question...

    Why is it that every song posted on GC is about weed? I know we all smoke it...but holy fuck is that all you're thinking about when you write shit down?? (not directed personally at your Dylbro)
     
  15. thanks for listening :) And to answer your question, since i just started rapping, it's hard to pick a topic. I thought weed would be a fun one to try. And the reason i posted it here is because it's a song about weed on a forum about weed.

    Soon I'm gonna start trying to write some shit about life and society
     

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