hmm so poems

Discussion in 'The Artist's Corner' started by WallaWalla, Mar 24, 2010.

  1. Not really one to share my poetry. But I like gc, so here's some stuff I wrote.

    Fate
    A gap divides space and time,
    Here the present, always left behind,
    No future to lead the way,
    No fate's hand, you choose your say,
    With the worst behind you,
    Time will never catch your woe,
    For all time is simultaneous,
    A presence that is felt throughout space's radius,
    Our love, compassion and hate,
    Are the real true fate.

    Care
    A single light illuminates my sky,
    A light that brings me oh so high,
    As my head fills the clouds,
    I float by a parade for the crowds,
    Too uncaring to care,
    Please look at the beauty of all this air,
    This dimension we borrow,
    Lucky to last till tomorrow,
    We just show no care,
    We destroy all this air, we share.

    Mine?
    The night's light,
    My red radiation it burns so bright,
    The butterflies over-take my head,
    As I grow more lost in your bed,
    A smile arrives as our eye's align,
    For at this moment I know you're forever mine,
    These lucid intervals are my soul,
    As days pass I slowly lose control,
    My disease grows stronger,
    Days seem longer and longer,
    All I see when I look in my head,
    Is you and I growing so lost in your bed.

    Just a few I have in my notebook. Tell me what you think.
     
  2. I would +rep you, but I've givin tomuch out..

    Nice poems. I got one I need to type up, my ex gave me before she passed away.. No one has really read it but me, so Ill post it up this once..
     
  3. Thanks man. And wow, kinda speechless. Sorry about your loss.
     
  4. #4 cloner_357, Mar 24, 2010
    Last edited by a moderator: Mar 30, 2010
    R.I.P Candace.

    :smoking:
     
  5. Thats a real nice poem. I like its style, a lot different then mine. +rep
     

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