eyes mouths noses looking whispering staring laughing sneaking spying conspiring hiding in the shadows crawling through the soap everywhere nowhere somewhere looking looking finding seeing understanding illusions ceasing illusions crushing rusty soldiers fighting the golden war sparking color stark depression overt opression escape escape escape chains keys and locked doors whispered converations hushed voices covert looks SHAPE WHAT DOES IT MEAN ? ponder, think open your mind see what i'm saying don't think the obvious I know what you are thinking i see into your mind
Im not gonna lie i dont really get it but i like it nonetheless if you want check out some writing i did when i was blazed http://forum.grasscity.com/artists-corner/397558-yet-another-story-i-wrote.html
Honest critique? In all, I really like it. Captivating beginning and imagery. But, you could consider rewording the closing. Does it have a specific meaning to you? I don't know if your choices symbolize anything, but I get the feel of this, I think.
