freestyle track check it out

Discussion in 'General' started by 5tudio716, Sep 5, 2012.

  1. Another arrogant youtube rapper....
     
  2. <3 loveyoutoo
     
  3. Not gonna lie...pretty gay.
     
  4. mhmm lets see both of you put your heads together and do one line better
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  6. #7 Flemian, Sep 5, 2012
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    lol because its so hard to rhyme and add personification and similies into the scheme of things... Oh dear god, how does anyone ever write a rap song. Watch:


    I flip lines and divide like multiplication twisted and rewind
    Yes I spit rhymes in a rythm so devine itll blow minds
    Hold spines the way I like to fuck from behind
    Oh my, like I made a mistake, trip without falling, levitate
    Yes Im a heavy weight but feelin kinda skinny
    I spit out lines like im the rhyme devinci
    You dont wanna fuck with me when Im feelin tipsy
    Cause like a fallin draddle every jew loves to spin me.
     
  7. it was decent but please no more weed rappers. wiz khalifa beat u to the punchline

    i think you need some better rhyme schemes or punch lines. i forget the word for it but yeah,better bigger words.
     


  8. Vocabulary.
     

  9. nah smokey you got it all wrong.

    i meant like,..... fucking damn it never mind
     

  10. Come on people, you know this is better than his whole verse.
     
  11. Rap is more dead than disco.
     

  12. Sir and/or very manly woman, I do not fancy myself a rapper. I have no rap skills whatsoever, so I concede to the fact that you're a better rapper than I'll ever be.

    However, since you asked...the instrumentals were too damn loud; it was hard to hear what you were saying about 75% of the time; your similes and metaphors were basic. and your vocabulary was even more basic than that...

    It was just like listening to a slightly talented 5th grader talk about themselves. Sorry dude...just being honest.
     
  13. Listen to some aotp, thats where its at
     

  14. Yeah... in 2001...




    Swizzz is the new shit.
     

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