haha i was high and started writing some rhymes down, heres what i came up with, tell me what ya think? i wanna talk a little about the meaning of peace it doesnt just mean that all the deaths and wars cease even though that its is a very big piece first all prejudice and judgements we must release we need to realize, that were all the same just another person in this life, its just a game its all about how we live ,and proclaim our name look at what your life has became just another person who trys to tame the thoughts of others its really a shame that the approval from others is your aim its not over yet theres still time for change so shoot for something thats in your range kill your ego, and start to rearrange whats really important, it might seem strange that when your grateful for what youve recieved it seems that before you were decived and you might even be a little relieved once your laughing at what you once believed once you realize, you were born with all you need only now, can you begin to proceed to live a life of charity, instead of greed and judge not, others for the lives they lead and now you have the power to increase the true meaning of the word peace
good stuff man. i noticed a couple of the lines (that if it was my poem) i'd slightly change the wording-- but the overall message and flow are great. it'd be even better accompanied by music would you mind if i used these lyrics to write myself a little guitar part to and record? i mean, i have no professional involvement in music, nor do i intend to any time in the near future.. but if i was ever gonna spread it i'd make sure credit went to my good ol' buddy chrispy. lol. i await your approval
haha in that case i am glad to honor you with the rights to use these words, as long as you show some love to good ol chrispy haha, rock on man, see if you can get it on the web so i can hear it, good luck
Get a composition book and start writing rhymes like fucking crazy; is all I have to say to you. Good rhyming talent
cool poem man, is writing like a hobby or did this just happen? either way, you're good at staying universal and simple but strong.
well one day my friends n i were just freestylin, n i kinda killed it so they liked it n always tell me to bust freestyles, so sometimes i just write down what comes to mind, i have alot of feelings id love to put into words but its just so hard, this is just my beginning i guess. thanks for the interest