Combustion of gas Emission of light Crushes all fear Created by night Comfort in its radiance Beauty in its elegance Solemn yet spontaneous Erratic yet it never quits A fight to survive Much like our own Deserves a respect That one cannot own
You have talent my man, let's see some more of it! If you have more work like this, as a fellow writer, you should totally make a shot at getting some published!
i almost never get into poetry, but I think you've got a good start. I think that line 4 on the second verse would work better with something like "erratic, yet tireless" Never quits doesn't seem to flow all that well.