first written rap (rate it 1-10)

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by fourtwozer0, Jan 28, 2010.

  1. #1 fourtwozer0, Jan 28, 2010
    Last edited by a moderator: Jan 28, 2010
    it's not the best - so don't hate.
    but it's probably the most emotional thing i've written to be honest
    in the end i dont really care if its good or not, just felt good to get shit off my chest.
    all constructive criticism is appreciated-

    BTW- i wrote it to this beat , so it might help ya'll feel it more
    [ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UkR1pyVSRlM"]YouTube- Madlib feat. Dudley Perkins - Fallin' (Instrumental)[/ame]

    Caught up in depression
    Makes me think, im constantly stressin
    Thats why im writin this poem
    Straight from the soul to let yall know em
    Pullin stuff from my head to keep up this flowin
    Writers blocks a bitch, thats why i keep on goin
    From droppin outta school, to fightin with my mom
    Makes me wonder, how i'm goin on
    Wanna be a better person,
    first things first, i need to stop gettin worse n
    ease my mind,
    too much weed will leave you behind
    says the counselor.
    i dont believe her, thats why i hit up my dealer
    hip hops always been apart of me,
    lets me kick back n see what ive came to be
    moving on with my life , im done with the felonies
    time to grow up, i aint a little kid
    nothin is what my dad has did
    on my own anymore, relyin on no one
    layin in my bed i thought i was done
    but i cant end this life, so much ahead of me
    that's why im tryin to find the best i can be
    Learnin from my mistakes,
    lookin out my window- watchin the snow flakes
    lifes so beautiful, hope it takes me away
     
  2. That was pretty good actually. probably a 7
     
  3. Thanks a lot, man.

    Lovin' that Mac Dre sig you got hahah. Good song

    "Uh huh, I don't do that. I'm a pimp slash rapper, I thought you knew that."
     
  4. Haha i was startin to think no one would recognize that. :D
     
  5. dudley perkins is dope anyone heard his salvia rap?
     
  6. Just listened right now... Pretty trippy. Shit was dope
     
  7. lol yeah it sounds like a salvia trip
     
  8. Hell yeah dude, found him like a month ago n love him.
    That salvia rap is dope as fuck.
    Sick song to listen to when you're blitzed.
     
  9. I need to get a hold of some salvia and listen to that
     

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