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Discussion in 'The Bookshelf' started by TheGreenGreek, Jan 6, 2019.

  1. #1 TheGreenGreek, Jan 6, 2019
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  2. Before I read this..........Are you Greek? Cypriot? Both?

    Would like an idea before I read this particularly long synopsis.
     
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  3. Hard to get through the first couple of sentences to be honest. Your style is not dynamic and the sentence structure is iffy in places. A good rewrite would have helped. Your second sentence is a fragment that makes no sense. You vacillate between past and present tense when discussing history.

    Don't mean to be mean, but if you got anything higher than a B- you got lucky.
     
  4. A bit muddled.
     
  5. Your text is too long, and, not sure how many people will read
     
  6. a bit confused
     

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