something new that i recorded this morning...looking for some feedback http://soundcloud.com/cberry8/chris-berry-a-different clouds of emotion, roll in, it's feeling kinda hard to breath in, demons, needing to write it off i'm really kinda lost, guess i'll let it all come to me flying higher while her words sting like a bumblebee it's humbling, the rumblings, resulting in a hunger wondering if i can be as happy as i was before once more i fell for her, fell so hard on my face what you see is what you get, nothing time can replace it's hard to be on that same road, to know where you're going but now it's snowing n cold n got you feeling so alone and it's been growing inside you, like a cancer you can't beat an answer you can't see, like where could this plan be? it vanished, to plan b, try to walk on water all you can do to please her, the one, she's daddy's daughter and what's harder is to see her when she ain't looking back so now i walk on by, a blank face, like a mask….it's in the past it's the feeling of ice cold rain that makes you see the sharp pain inside your chest when it almost hurts to breathe it's the place you wanna go where nobody else can be it's the beauty of her smile that's been bothering me it's the feeling of ice cold rain that makes you see all the words she used to say that would make you feel complete it's the place you wanna go where nobody else can be but she could look in my eyes, and know what's bothering me so much time has passed since i last saw her face isn't it funny what you remember whenever you hear her name all the places you both went n different times you shared behind the lids of your eyes as you stop and you stare i don't care for this daydreaming, it's the reason i forget the reason i moved on, no reason to forge it i used to just cling on, so much that i forced it now energy's wasted, saved gas on no more trips down memory lane, thought it was keeping me sane thought that the pain in my eyes was someone else's to blame shots in my head seemed to rang out, the evilness came down something that's my fault, zoomed in past the foreground most people will turn on the love they before found too busy riding the highs up, forget it can sink down i've come to begin to think what i could be now been thinking a long time, no wonder i see how a pair can mistreat these feelings that need trials sacrifice self for, unanswered redials be wise like a sycamore when looking for free smiles no money could add up, regardless i'm broke now it's the feeling of ice cold rain that makes you see the sharp pain inside your chest when it almost hurts to breathe it's the place you wanna go where nobody else can be it's the beauty of her smile that's been bothering me it's the feeling of ice cold rain that makes you see all the words she used to say that would make you feel complete it's the place you wanna go where nobody else can be but she could look in my eyes, and know what's bothering me
1 more time just because it has views also looking for someone who makes beats...not really looking for bangers. but if you feel the style i'm going for you can tell i just want a well-mixed instrumental.
I don't know why, but the beat sounded like the quality is low or something. I only really noticed it in the intro. Good shit on the track itself. If the Jcole avatar is a hint to the influence of your style, I wouldn't say you two aren't too far off writing-wise. You have a certain way with words thats just dope to me. If you got on a better beat it would make it that much doper. Hopefully you can find a producer that compliments your style.
nice man, i actually kinda like the beat (although the quality its self is kinda low),did you make it yourself? it's got a nujabe's ish vibe, combined with ur hook it reminds me of feather. i also like the sentiment of ur music combined with ur sig. shows ur doin it for the right reasons. maybe just work on ur delivery a bit, chill on the mic, it's nice man.