can u tell me what u think of this

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by paromemusic, Jan 23, 2012.

  1. #1 paromemusic, Jan 23, 2012
    can u rate n tell me what i need to improve on? [ame=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zT-veRpVFK0]Dreams Money Can Buy - YouTube[/ame]
     
  2. #2 Bank of Dank, Jan 23, 2012
    can barely hear the voice (have to actually read the lyrics)
     
  3. #3 paromemusic, Jan 24, 2012
    so is thats all thats wrong? do u like the lyrics?
     
  4. #4 insight420, Jan 24, 2012
    Your English, for one.
     
  5. #5 paromemusic, Jan 24, 2012
    -.- what's wrong with my english?
     
  6. #6 buller, Jan 24, 2012
    most excellent, you rock change nothing, wait you started rappin about money, nvm your just status quo joe
     
  7. #7 Illusional, Jan 24, 2012
    It's pretty good, theres a few cheesey lines in there but its pretty sweet overall. Just put more feelings and emotions into your rappin like when your spittin, it sounds abit plain
     
  8. #8 Kiefsweat, Jan 24, 2012
    i really liked the beat alot, whos is that?
    like dude said, put more emotion into it. you sound like the typicalwhite kid that just started writing raps yesterday.
     
  9. #9 paromemusic, Jan 24, 2012

    well the songs called "Dreams Money Can Buy" so money kinda has to be mentioned plus im not bragging abt having it.
     
  10. #10 paromemusic, Jan 24, 2012
    im the mexican kid whos been writing for a few yrs tho :( lol. well everyone said put more emotion intoo it so ima have to work on that.
     
  11. #11 Bank of Dank, Jan 24, 2012

    yeah the lyrics are straight, it's not music I listen to normally but the lyrics aren't bad. have some more songs?
     
  12. #12 paromemusic, Jun 5, 2012



    yeah i just posted 2 more vids on my youtube channel
     

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