I wrote this up pretty quickly today and recording a rough copy. I have my own areas of concern and still need to master it but wanted other peoples opinions. Going to re-record when I'm perfectly happy with the track, (still need a hook too/maybe 3rd verse-if anyone's interested)I usually don't put much effort into my work, this is a first for me. phILLy- AcknowLedgendary by skillphillydaillone on SoundCloud - Create, record and share your sounds for free there was a time where everything was astonoshing the past was gone cuz the future looked promising dont tear when your heart gets weary don't fear when its all in theory nobody hears me, i still jot it down still ridin these lanes til i bottom out still toin these lines like im outta bounds still not makin any sense on these common grounds still goin thru the pain and the struggle life can change in a couple, it might bring rain in the rubble, flames to the hustle but you know i still play games in the puddles i wake up wonderin lookin at the world so different, I just feel so distant hype alone, writin poems in a lighter tone i remember when i first picked up the microphone i could never put it down like a fiend for crack it gave me a passion that I seemed to lack they said my sixteens and schemes were whack but since when is word of mouth deemed a fact? i didn't change, you just didn't know me if only my heart wasn't so damn lonely got it? good, stable as I should be i gotta leave the whats if's and could be's, ive been in overdrive tryin keepin hope alive flow it live dope like the coke inside a soda riiight i know you noticed but the focus isn't over i tend to bust it open if you lookin for the closure then you lookin at the wrong man, armed with the strong hand gotta flush like lebron jams, back to the song man sorry, but i've never been a rebel don't listen to the devil you'll be tryin to make it level and i made it uneven, but ya mans still breathen the fans been leavin but the plans been heated well at least the sun is still shining, and even today the funs still rhymin and you just wanna party after rest and i'm just doin lines til I cardiac arrest guady lookin fresh, you just party with the best actin naughty from marley n bacardi you feelin stressed sorry your a mess but who's partly to blame cuz we might have been a match but hardly a flame i'm breathen air, so I gotta be relevant Should I gain the whole world and lose my intelligence
hahahahaaaaaa man this was so sick, except the vox are low i can understand but this should be heard keeep writing cause youre good man! I really llike the name you picked too, acknowledgendary, fuckin epic lol
thanks for the good words, I'll take the vocal levels into consideration..And the name just came to me haha it's pretty ridiculous.
love the beat, but it seems like your energy is lacking, your kinda monotonous in it, the lyrics were good but they could be delivered better i think, your flow is real mechincal, just like line for line, instead of flowin' the verse, with hardly any switch ups in it, play with the flow man, don't just recite words, spit that shit... its not bad, but i feel like you could make it so so much better
Yea ita a rough draft if you read the first post and thanks for the criticism..the monotone style is kinda just what i do (nas, gangstarr type)
lol this started playing when i plugged my phone into my car stereo earlier, vox were definitely louder but still distant feeling beat overpowered a bit, but the lyrics are impacting though and I was repping down the street!