A song or two I wrote

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by TheRoeBiz, Jun 10, 2007.

  1. Realized my thread was getting no veiws in the artists corner and it was in the wrong forum anywho.


    http://myspace.com/offsuittheband

    Two songs on there but no lyrics because we changed lead singers and haven't recorded the new stuff yet.

    Here are some of the lyrcis I've written for the band. Thought my fellow stoners might enjoy this.



    The Rain and the rapture
    Lyrics for a song ( it was a poem first but I had to change some things, ended up liking the new version better anyway.)

    Here we're going again.
    Left a good friend alone at the bend.
    Oh, how I've tried for such a long, long time
    but I can no longer pretend
    we're meeting up again at the end

    I know I'll find a way
    to travel through all of my pain.
    The rain only comes so the seeds can grow
    and in this dreary month of may;
    I light one up and say farewell to the day.

    truth is known and the act is brave,
    as flowers bloom on forgotten graves.
    It's all thanks to the rain.
    It washes away all of our shame.
    Let them play their silly games,
    soon they'll be no one left behind to blame.

    The rain only comes so that seeds can grow
    and in this dreary month of may;
    I light one more up and say farewell to the day.

    Feedback? No need to be nice, nice doesn't help much.
     
  2. one of the better works I've read on this forum. It flows very nicely and there's no blatant or lame contradictions. You're not writing just to write, which is good.
     
  3. Couldn't agree more with Ruse, good work Biz. You're not jotting down random lines that are only there because they rhyme like so much stuff on the forums. It's very refreshing to actually read some good lyrical work, +rep for ya.
     

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