A Rhyme i put together

Discussion in 'Music genres, Bands and Artists' started by Kingpinjones, Dec 6, 2011.

  1. Hey guys i wrote this little rhyme/rap recently, and i was wonderin if you guys could tell me how it sounds because its part of a project for the band and i wanna know how it sounds.

    These days we're hearing of the tragedies, i
    magine these:
    papa walkin down the street his little girl in hand
    didn't see it comin
    what is it?
    its a truck driving by with the windows rolled down
    all you can see is the shape of a gun then blam,
    her papa was done
    so many things in this life are wrong
    junkies, the homeless, its a tragic song
    and it never ends and it just gets worse:
    motha fucka be chillin at home just doin his thing
    to his surprise his phone starts to ring.what is it
    its a frenzied voice that said 5pm on june 21
    his homie pulled the trigger and ate the gun
    couldn't take the pain of life and all to come
    he went out fast but at least he's numb.
    its not as far away as you might think
    this type of thing happens everywhere
    just ask me how, because i was there
    not long ago
    in a town not far away
    i got word from jimi his words came in a tidal
    he was sending me his will, completely suicidal
    i had no car no ride no time to slide
    some time rolls by
    what is it?
    its a story gone right
    jimi standin on a chair in his room
    about to jump
    when it really kicks in, he's got a life to live
    some love to give and a goal to meet
    my buddies alright and he's livin large
    but the fear i felt was overcharged
    it happens everyday its not a question
    and you never see it comin
    what is it?
    It's life.
    But its not so bad
    when i'm starin at the clouds
    and i'm sittin outside bein all red eyed
    chokin on the earth but drinkin in the sky.
    its the moments like these that keep us alive
    when we're just hanging out
    everything is goin just right, ya gotta go with the flow
    and enjoy your life,
    its not the end until fat lady sings
    i don't here a single note cuz i'm to busy tryin things
    tryin to make due but i have a hard time
    thats just how it goes it ain't nothin special
    so if your feelin selfish, wanna drop yourself
    remember you aint the first or the last to try
    all its gonna do is make your buddies cry
    so go on with life just give it some time
    keep doin your thing cuz it ain't no crime
    to want what you want and get what ya can
    try to make a livin here beneath the sun
    remember this is life and you only get one.
     
  2. Thats mad deep. I can dig it
     
  3. thanks it took me a good hour to write it and its supposed to be kind of a statement
     

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