I had a title for it but it made no sense to what my stoney poem was about. Before I left home I sat and lit a joint Fire burning paper, ash falling from its point Inhaling natures plant as it fades into smoke Awakening my mind as the effects begin to soak I'm halfway thorugh and I slowly begin to fly Into the clouds I soar, But am I up to high? I finish the rest and start floating into space See unatural movements and colours of embrace I stand up and adventure in a now vibrant world I admire it more as I do many twirls My eyes see paradise, My nose smells fragrance I'm enjoying the most of only natures presences Carry on walking and something catches me Heavy bassed music pulses through my body Ears filled with many sounds and I hear them all I follow the echoes as my senses crave more As I get closer I feel vibrations through my feet My hands subconsciously tapping to it's beat That's it. I think my mind went blank after this hahaha.
It's good, has a lot of imagery, just having a difficult time figuring out the rhyme scheme. My favorite stanza was the last one. Least favorite was the first because the rhymes seemed forced, like they didn't flow off the tongue. Second one seemed a bit more flowy but still slightly had forced rhymes. It seems like your creativity kicked in second stanza and you started feeling the poem by the third. Omega369