Read my paper on Marijuana, give tips on how to improve

at the end put, I was to stoned to acttualy write this paper so i downloaded it.,,nice work m8

 

long term effects is wrong. marijuana doesnt contain all of the cancer causing chemicals tobacco does. if it did it would cause cancer lol

edit: sorry read it wrong but im still pretty sure cannabis doesnt contain any of the same chemicals as tobacco i could be wrong tho

 

Lol, I would speak really fast and say I smoke weed in a line when every one is snoozing off...but that is my personality im pretty goofy, plus all my teachers know im a stoner, they know im high every day (not that i had a tbrake now)..i told them str8 up im baked, they can't do any thing cuz im a daily stoner and have high t levels

 

i recently had to write a paper and i choose pot but mines 4 pages haha itll be up when i get it back

 

WAY too many run on sentences, break your paper into more sentences that are shorter, once you do this your essay will look better and be easier to read, work on puncuation also and don't use slang when describing things, like when you say "its most common to be smoked and rolled in a J," don't say J, say joint.





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what I just wrote is a run on sentence.

 

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm... im in a good mood so i will see how i can help.

If you need this essay to be longer there are a ton of places where you could really elaborate, but by looking at the briefness of your paper it seems like you are already good on length.

There are a few grammar errors, mostly with commas.

"The drug I will be researching for my paper, Marijuana, due to its widespread popularity is known by many different names, some of which include ; weed, dope, spliff, skunk, bud, Buddha, grass, j, joint, reefer, dank, pot, mary jane, puff and cannabis."

The opening sentence is boring. You dont need to tell them what your paper is on, hopefully the title will tell them that, or it will be obvious by the paper itself. The "due..." part also sounds kinda wrong... take that out, or better yet, start off by giving some sort of fact that illustrates its "widespread populatity" Im sure there is a statistic out there that is something like 50% of teens will have tried marijuana before they finish highschool or something along those lines.

Change the ; to a :.


"There are also many ways to consume marijuana, the most popular way is to smoke it by rolling a j, putting the weed in a pipe, or using a water pipe called a bong, smoking isn’t the only way to consume , you can bake it into dessert by using cannabutter and you can drink it as tea"

This is a run on sentence. Are there "many ways to consume marijuana" or just two? because you only tell them two, smoking and ingesting (or eating, or whatever you wanna call it in your paper). I would change that one sentence above into the following:

"Marijuana can either be smoked or ingested, smoking being the most common method. There are many ways to smoke marijuana..." then tell them about joints and bongs and pipes and what not. Also add vaporizors.

Then you say that "you can bake it into dessert", well, if its cannabutter you can eat it in any way that you would eat butter. It doesnt have to be a dessert, it could simply be toast and cannabutter.

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history of marijuana:

"on the face of the earth" that phrase is way overused, no need to be "face of the earth", just tell them its been around for thousands of years. Oh, after the thought about it being around for a long time, USE A PERIOD!!! start a new sentence at "it was used be anceint..." dont start off by telling them that these ancient civilizations just used it as medication... tell them that it has many uses, give the medical, then the raw material crap, and im sure you can find some spiritual/religious usues too.
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Ok, reread your whole paper and look for places where you should take out a comma and put in a period... you'll find a bunch.

Also look how lazy you got at the second half of your paper. You went from two run on sentences per section to just one semi-runon sentence per section.


Good luck on your essay, im too lazy to go through your whole paper.... but hopefully this helps a little bit.

EDIT: http://www.libraryonline.com/default.asp?pID=33 take a look at that too, it will be boring but it will really help you in your punctuation. Like in that first sentence where you set off the ", marijuana," in commas, the sentence should flow if you were to skip over that part entirely, yours doesnt, which is why it sounds wrong.

 

If you are going to write a paper on marijuana it has to be AMAZINGLY well put together. So many people turn in papers on marijuana and it's the same old BS from each student.

You need to get many facts backing what you say, then get articles to back up the original statement and articles to back up your back ups.

Use good analogies as well.

Best paper I've ever written was for my first year of college classes and it was on Above the Influence. I took a great deal of time researching and it payed off, so sit at your desk a bit longer and keep on it.

 

Don't forget how marijuana has helped teach Americans the metric system for decades.

 

haha that's soo great. i dint even realize until now i knew the metric system because of bud. nice

 

Dude, Fuck this paper, Hand out every student a joint and the teacher a blunt...let them smoke then read your paper.....you will get A+