Euphoria

[smokingjoe68]

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please offer me your critiques, but gently. I'm fragile beyond your comprehension, possibly

IS 666 THE MARK, OR THE ACT IN APPLYING IT which do i wish to know

i know, or do i, who is real

i wish a judge or juror? because i see a difference, you're more real than i
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[designatedtoker]

woooo your a budding poet, i like your words! lots.
gods are great poets.

[smokingjoe68]

Originally Posted by designatedtoker

woooo your a budding poet, i like your words! lots.
gods are great poets.

you're to kind

[castaneda]

SJ, you have something wonderful to offer. I'm not 100% sure that you know this, but I'm the kind of person that wouldn't say that if I didn't appreciate your poem in particular.

I think we're alot alike as some of the first poetry I wrote was the first time I smoked weed. I was so happy it worked and my consciousness was altered I went over to get something to write on and started making observations with all my friends meandering around the dorm - I didn't care.

Then I got up in front of a bunch of people spur of the moment at a poetry reading thing and just started making shit up and rhyming. I can't believe that people embraced it, but they really did - and that was an expression of euphoria as well that returned the feeling again when I shared it.

Don't want to make this about me, but just trying to relate the info to you.

On another note, one of my worst students ever, that brought a knife to school and shit - the other day I was filling out paperwork and noticed a 666 together in her ID number. Being athiest, I don't read much into it, but I do believe our consciousness creates "synchronicities" or whatever you want to call them, and we'll notice coincidences to suit the needs of our personal story.

On judge and jury, I think we're all both ... but I'd rather be judge for the power trip and jury duty sucks.

And you're as real as it gets Joe. I see myself in you as do so many at grasscity - and that's no fucking joke. I sincerely hope you continue your poetry if it feels like a healthy outlet for you.

Hope that's gentle enough critique, but honestly I didn't feel the need to censor. And if somebody does bash what you do, it'll probably only make your poetry better in some way after you process it.

Having fun visiting with you lately man, cheers!

[smokingjoe68]

thx, castaneda. you're a true friend, imo. you don't make shit up to appease me as so many. you're true to yourself in your communications with me and that is one thing I respect the most in another. I'm very happy that you can relate to the words I wrote and am very much interested in how they apply to you. by, "more real than i", I believe I was reffering to the way that the reality around me effects me less than you, or another. at the time actual reality didn't have very much influence over my consciousness, I don't know if that makes a lot of sense or not, but that was my expression of what I was feeling. I don't know if I'll pursue writing poetry or not, but it was nice to try and tap what I was feeling in my innermost being and try to communicate it. ty, peace and love

[Silly Sativa]

You've definately got something there, my first thought was Thoreau or Emerson. Keep embracing that mentality, I believe you may find something incredible on the other side.

[castaneda]

Joe, I remember one teacher saying he'd live in his own little bubble apart from the rest of the world, and the old man was obviously at peace with himself.

Some of my older friends have mellowed out and that's good for me because I'm high strung myself at 34. So when I get some advice at work or whatever, I'll freely admit that I know I'll mellow out over time, like so many I watched.

But I have to make a spiritual practice of building that bubble though. Best things for me are stuff like taking our border collie to the dog park later today. The Thoreau and Emerson ideas are most about taking the time to pay attention and appreciate for yourself. Poetry written outdoors is some of my favorite. Just whatever makes you feel good about yourself.

Could be totally off with my insights, but that's all I've gots to offer...

Lucky for me, having the summer off, I'm about to rebuild my bubble. Won't feel so much like a judge or even a jury at that point.

Thanks again SJ, you are a true friend.

[smokingjoe68]

Originally Posted by Silly Sativa

You've definately got something there, my first thought was Thoreau or Emerson. Keep embracing that mentality, I believe you may find something incredible on the other side.

WOW!!! I don't know what to say, other than I'm not worthy. TY, you've made my year with such a comparison. alas, I'm a goof in this new found joy of mine, only the names Thoreau, and Emerson are familiar to me, I've not yet been exposed to any of their works, but hey, I'm in the library right now, so I think I'll check something out to take home, thx, again. peace

Originally Posted by castaneda

Joe, I remember one teacher saying he'd live in his own little bubble apart from the rest of the world, and the old man was obviously at peace with himself.

Some of my older friends have mellowed out and that's good for me because I'm high strung myself at 34. So when I get some advice at work or whatever, I'll freely admit that I know I'll mellow out over time, like so many I watched.

But I have to make a spiritual practice of building that bubble though. Best things for me are stuff like taking our border collie to the dog park later today. The Thoreau and Emerson ideas are most about taking the time to pay attention and appreciate for yourself. Poetry written outdoors is some of my favorite. Just whatever makes you feel good about yourself.

Could be totally off with my insights, but that's all I've gots to offer...

Lucky for me, having the summer off, I'm about to rebuild my bubble. Won't feel so much like a judge or even a jury at that point.

Thanks again SJ, you are a true friend.

that's a wonderful thing you've given me my friend.

[smokingjoe68]

Here's another I spent a few days on before I used some ink on the thought. I tried to add some time and rhyme. I'm very much interested in improving now and so let me have, no need to hold back, give me your sincere criticisms, without sugar. TY

Scream for me!

All your pain and your fear
I'm for real, I'm right here.

All your screams and your cries
Amuse me with your tries.

Beg mercy with your pleas
Crackling logs, they're to me.

Justice is, what you say
Must prevail here today.

Your villain? yes, it's true
Truth be told, I am you.

peace and love all

[castaneda]

Originally Posted by smokingjoe68

Scream for me!

All your pain and your fear
I'm for real, I'm right here.

All your screams and your cries
Amuse me with your tries.

Beg mercy with your pleas
Crackling logs, they're to me.

Justice is, what you say
Must prevail here today.

Your villain? yes, it's true
Truth be told, I am you.

peace and love all

I prefer this one to the first in terms of tempo and readability. You've got some insight to share - and I know you do even if you're not making poetry of it. But I think you have a knack for this. As long as you're getting something positive out of it and not bored with it, I suggest continuing. Looks like letting it percolate worked.

[smokingjoe68]

thx, man. yeah, I agree, taking the time to choose more carefully how I want to communicate my thought and confining it in a way to make it flow almost as music makes it much more effective. your encouragement is a fuel for me my friend.

thx also to the other that imo. unjustly compaired my words with the likes of Emmerson and Thoreau. I've picked a collection of each and started with my first exposure to some of the great ones. for no particular reason, I started with Mr. Ralph Waldo Emmerson and am amazed that the words from another 160 years ago could speak to me so clearly and practically. I'm struggling a little with the old king James english, but am slowly picking it up through context. I've not read to much yet, but my favorite so far is, "Woodnotes 1", and, "Woodnotes 2", hope I remembered the titles correctly, lol.

peace

[smokingjoe68]

Winter

The winter wind, she carries
An answer to your queries.
Will you face her now, so bold,
And hear the story she's told,
To so many before you?

She whispers to the hearty,
Whom fear, only they're tardy,
And might miss her ancient speech,
As all those she could not teach,
Her epilogue, tried and true.

Final days, to many, yes.
Her designer made this test.
Keep her company this time,
Another year, then is thine.
In time, old will yield to new.

In your final winter, when
You submit to her, and then;
Find her haggard and awful?
Will you find her beautiful?
Of each opinion, a few.

Cheerfully, meet her and give.
Run to beat her and try live.
You had your turn, now she takes,
And gives another fair shake.
Willfully, accept your due.


I've been told of a place to read my work and am anxious to get reactions a new way. I'm still very much interested in sharing here as well and look forward to all your words of critique. ty all, I'm starting to think I've found something in this my new passion as well.

Oh, and ty very much, whomever starred my thread, it's much appreciated. peace and love

[PipePuffer]

I like all of them, but i like the last one the best. I hardly have any "education" as you put it when it comes to poetry, but i still know what i like and dont like. And i like all three of your writings very much, specially the last one

[castaneda]

Originally Posted by PipePuffer

I like all of them, but i like the last one the best. I hardly have any "education" as you put it when it comes to poetry, but i still know what i like and dont like. And i like all three of your writings very much, specially the last one

I agree. Was in a hurry when I read this the first time, but remember thinking that these get better. It seems like this stuff is evolving for you. The last one had me thinking of some lyrics, "tie yourself to the mast my friend, and the storm will end" from a verve song.

tried to find the emerson book and the thoreau book on my shelf, but they went with a bunch of others I sold back to half price books. But found the Night Thoreau Spent in Jail - the most famous act of civil disobedience in American history - "the most widely produced play of our time" Published 1972, the year I was born.

looks interesting, I'll have to flip through it.

Let us know how the poetry reading goes. Got me thinking about doing something new now - not sure what yet.

[smokingjoe68]

My reading goes a little slow, still working in Emmerson, haven't cracked Thoreau yet, but I think I will when I get home, you've intrigued me. I wrote two yesterday, one here I'm almost positive to get rave reviews, lol, I hope, the other more for believers but maybe others may relate. Let me know what ya'll think.

Marijuana Smoker


Poplars and the oaks,
Dancing while we toke.
Wind is a giver,
Sings with the river.
Toking all day long.

Flying higher now,
To nature, we'll bow.
As the river swirlls,
Birds chirp with squirrells.
Listen to our song.

From the heart of land,
Sky high, down to sand,
Love sings loudly here,
Pleasing all our ear.
Toking from our bong.

All those whom dare not,
Share not, in our lot.
Of us whom we do,
Seek nothing from you.
How can this be wrong?

War on drugs, you say?
Appears not, the way.
Kill us, you've named thugs,
No harm to the drugs.
Let's all get along.



This my favorite to date