Poetry 101

[.ViciouS.]

I got an idea since I've been seeing a lot of people post poems only to get lost in all the threads in this section, so maybe if you wanted to at any time you feel inspired just post in this thread.

And of course share any other work that you have done, I love reading poetry no matter the subject. As for me I'd love to discuss poems and the vibe I get from reading them, so if you got something to say go ahead, no fear, we're all adults here.

I'm not giving this one any title, it really could mean anything:

If at any time you reminisce,
then at least remember this,
the memory of that moment you exist,
to jump off a cliff without a parachute to glide,
as your intent was to soar high and fly,
but dropped like a rock that proceeded into a dive,
all you could do was look up top, you fret, to stop,
when the whole time you could of just looked straight and walked.

An older one I posted already:

FOREVER AND NEVER
Spheres of light shine bright
Fire laid out in the sky
The sun shares its last rays
One not seen in many days
A group of birds soars high
Not a chance to let this go by
A view that borders ecstasy
And here you sit next to me
So glad I'd rather share this sight
Than sit here alone tonight

Time stops but lips move
Fears and anxieties soothed
Past calamities never seemed so smooth
While we wait, wait so long to choose
The future we no longer wish to prove
Transcend the stars, soar to infinite
We do this all so well
While not taking life so seriously

For now we stare into the diamonds of the sky
Cherish the cool night as a means to get by
But not to waste time but to embellish it
Chill with nature while it still has merit
Because we've realized what we love falls apart bit by bit
Each night a jewel falls off the sky, a tool that fell behind
Dimmer and dimmer sights fail to shimmer
The line of tolerance grows thinner

By now its dark, but not in our hearts
Illuminating within, we have from the start
Internal love to suppress our rage
While we take part on this everchanging stage
Not as an actor but as a factor
In the book of life we'll write atleast one chapter
One full of joy that fills voids with laughter
Living to experience the things that matter

[.ViciouS.]

Most people gather friends to sit around and get wasted,
I find it boring to get shit faced and act abrasive,
I rather get high, get buds that seems laced
to the point where you can almost taste it,
But lets face it, it's all d9thc, you can see mine, no heresy,
I don't let it get the best of me
And i'll still act all fine and true, no lies,
Why don't you try it on for size,
I'll guarantee that it'll light up your eyes,
your mind will be mezmerized, no doubt
since i started i've loved life and all the green in it,
above strive, my dreams seem to trasncend infinite,
If this is a game I'm here to win it, while
enjoying all the things that amuse me, and no I don't let bud abuse me,
like most people assume to see,
those who use it in their favor know that it's got their back, infact since we overcome
this feat, we'll be wiser, true that,
and no one will stop me for my decisions are my own,
I harm no one while blazing in my home,
It doesn't make me a terrorist or cause me to see a therapist,
I want to be set free and this path that i follow is sure to stress me,
But I know i'll be alright because I always got buddha to bless me.

[.ViciouS.]

My old highschool "philosophy of life" paper, except I wrote it in poetry form with consent from my teacher.

SHINE ON
One life, one mind to find what I seek, undefined,
I waited for a sign, it took many years to realize it will never
find me, astounded, my life had passed before my eyes,
no rewind to bring back time,

Present 1999,
I became at face to face to my first major mistake,
I grew to be best friends with someone fake,
It cost me $300 to make him show his true weight, misguided,

Fortunately,
I learned much, was quick to move on though the past clung on,
But always learning from wrong is what builds me up strong,
Appreciating what I have now, not when its gone,
and the freedom to choose what you should do, since life's at stake,
Its underlying source split in two, good and evil,
Mother nature and human corruption,
I placed myself in both factions,
Fact is, nature overwhelmed me with glee,
So I shall forever helm myself in its plea,
And explain that in it, it will provide all that we need,
A seed that's bound to grow,
But up to us people, to decide its flow,
In due course,
Greed is more often sought, some plot money over life,
Continuing on the strife, the easy way out
Some assume then that life is worth cash, determined at last that your chip stack must be at mass with a king's stash, deceit,
Uncommonly known that to succeed will not strictly be achieved through fame or fortune,
It's whatever you believe in to give you reason to find that life,
Is not worthless if you find your own purpose,
For me,
A positive entity, one full of bliss, so I try to express myself to those close with thoughtfulness,
Because without true friends, even righteous minds descend into dead ends,
So I stay forever keen to be aware at all times, through bad to fair, because if I never expect it to be over, change will strike, seen as an illusive cobra,
But my experiences, true sight, beams eternal supernova,
Illuminate, to guide the ride that I must face in dark flight,
Wont stop for bait, mines designed to degrade my mind, I will shine on,
Mindset upon spreading knowledge, no frolic, truth fed but always close to contemplate,
Is it right for you?
The decision is yours, but I can guarantee that the truth will at times hurt,
But I believe once your eyes can fully see, you will feel the essence of no constraint,
The presence of being untainted is sure to be forever told, and with this you can become the change you seek in the world that lay at your feet, ready to unfold,
So when I die, as long as I know that I strived for a high that soars way past blue skies, will be unique to me,
Then no regret shall linger, through my rise to overcome lies, to find
I conquered a peak yet to be,
The word impossible dissolved, my mind to end completely in resolve, evolved,
And the world, it remains to be yours,
Golden, if you stay true to your source,
The force pursuing to resonate the fact,
That all people are equal and chances of a sequel, unreliable,
But undeniable that,
Life is wealth,
Although seemingly stealth,
You always have choice,
The one voice, through thick and thin,
The time is now for it to begin.


And a couple of other old poems;

Sometimes people often search for where grace is,
Faith bellows in the hearts of many races in different places,
Forgotten, that where you need to search is within the mind,
And find, that if one thing mattered after inevitable death,
Is the irreplacable experience before one's last breathe,

So the question of all this wonder comes out to this,
Is regretting something you experienced worse than not?
Sounds of time hold only a dime for life to reminisce,
But one full of bliss is is worth more than time has got,
Being free from all of the constraints placed on thought.
----
Envision the world as placid energy of endless streams,
Imagine spheres of ecstactic colors only seen within dreams,
Collision after collision of beings flying contortedly with glee,
Within these frivolous scenes you can take part of the world i see.

[MorningTrip]

I think this is a great idea. Nice work, by the way.

I've got a little to add:

The World in a Saucer
A momentary aurora of light
Blinding the eyes
Of a lonely heart
And piercing the silence
Which slithers on the
Crimson atmosphere
Leaving thorough
Paradigms and cliches
On the surface of
The faded leaves
Of memories
Spiraling parallel
Between a thought
And a Broken life
Is a decorum gesture
Merely of relation
To the attention
Given in a polished
Shed of eye-lining
Blood droplets
And draperies?
Such Immaculate tears
Trapped in dreams
Reminisce of
open-handed
Late-October Sadness
Of my wondering
Mystic lady-friend
Mourning(morning)
Along leaflets
Binding to the
River's outskirt

[thegreenfairy]

THE JUNE GRASS


How does the sun go down?
I am writhing in the ground
I am buried in a mound - tell me!
How does the earth go ‘round?

Why do the morning birds cry?
I need silence once in awhile
It drives me wild - tell me!
Why does the June grass die?

When snow flakes cover this hill
(‘Though the world is just a window sill
That looks out on an eye) then
The universe is but a bitter pill

Where is the spring’s breeze sprite?
And the wood nymphs glowing at night?
I am writhing in my mound - tell me!
Why has the June grass died?





RED ROSE



Where does your garden grow?
I was just so bored today
Home where a willow flows

How could you feel dandy?
Oh, how a red rose grows
Slow and thorny till it snows

Does some fellow show
All he ever knows?
Flowers and candy I suppose

Oh, how a red rose grows
Slow - and thirty by the time it knows
Home where I, mellow, grow

[its_420]

roses are red and violets are blue
my plants are growin like its the thing to do
i hope they make it to a pound and a half
but thats wishfull thinking so ill go get smashed
hey its me and now i am toasted
wont u join me then we can get roasted!
pooooooooooooooooooooooooooooot!!!!

[thegreenfairy]

^ my fav poem ever.

[.ViciouS.]

the earth refuses to leave a footstep, it has no mind to do so
Even if i walked this path
knowing nothing of what is ahead of me
eyes in the back of my head
grow tired of the repeated scenes

take a left, take a right
now im back to where i've always been
my mind is restless as the wind bats the trees
the ground my feet stand on looks bleak to me
yet i can't think of another place i'd rather be

my surroundings altogether sits so serenely
burning deep within planting seeds of desire
only to grow into fiery starlights

oh, so distant and far
i tried to grab ahold of it
the river that runs through it

the harder i tried, the less i had control

only to now realize
when i let go
i could change the flow
and eventually

the flow would run through me

as it will for you.

[OsoGreen]

Originally Posted by thegreenfairy

THE JUNE GRASS


How does the sun go down?
I am writhing in the ground
I am buried in a mound - tell me!
How does the earth go ‘round?

Why do the morning birds cry?
I need silence once in awhile
It drives me wild - tell me!
Why does the June grass die?

When snow flakes cover this hill
(‘Though the world is just a window sill
That looks out on an eye) then
The universe is but a bitter pill

Where is the spring’s breeze sprite?
And the wood nymphs glowing at night?
I am writhing in my mound - tell me!
Why has the June grass died?





RED ROSE



Where does your garden grow?
I was just so bored today
Home where a willow flows

How could you feel dandy?
Oh, how a red rose grows
Slow and thorny till it snows

Does some fellow show
All he ever knows?
Flowers and candy I suppose

Oh, how a red rose grows
Slow - and thirty by the time it knows
Home where I, mellow, grow

that's great, used poetic convention without sounding forced. lovely stuff. keep up the good work.

[OsoGreen]

we slow time...
to watch clouds float westward
to sneak tokes
on china town roof-tops.
we sneak tokes
to gaze down...
town,
where they hustle like ants [eating ants]
but they don't know...
the sun is setting
on the business district.

-Oso Green

it needs some work, but i like the initial idea. it's just a toking rant bout money and business and all that crap that complicates our lives. true story, too. went to L.A. friday, riding the subways with a friend, smoking at every stop.
: ]

peace


p.s. honest, constructive criticism would be appreciated! seriously, i'd rather hear it sucks, and why it sucks then "it's good" and no reason. i want to become a better writer! i have some non-fiction too, essays on things.


and anyy suggestions for a title???


oh yea, and you're right, vicious. poems just get lost in the artists' corner.
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[Plex1]

there was recently a school shooting near me. this isnt great but i dc


STOP lieing STOP hiding STOP all the fucking violence STOP- Materialism and STOP- all the fighting--- Stop and treat a girl like a motherfucking woman and i bet you you would care if you knew 'em.
Self absorbance is our problem and violence not the answer.. so think before you tell em put they hands up.
Think before you call that silly harmless little name and insecurity is not the one to blame.
Its people behind it all
we slowly break eachother down
until theres 32 victims on the ground.

[OsoGreen]

Originally Posted by Plex1

there was recently a school shooting near me. this isnt great but i dc


STOP lieing STOP hiding STOP all the fucking violence STOP- Materialism and STOP- all the fighting--- Stop and treat a girl like a motherfucking woman and i bet you you would care if you knew 'em.
Self absorbance is our problem and violence not the answer.. so think before you tell em put they hands up.
Think before you call that silly harmless little name and insecurity is not the one to blame.
Its people behind it all
we slowly break eachother down
until theres 32 victims on the ground.

you blither. quit it. i agree with you, but you blither incoherently. and your swearing seems...trite. sorry, all things i'm sure a lot of us have strong feelings against, but...yea.

edit: on second thought, it's okay. i didnt realize it was a poem? lacks focus, form. maybe try editing it, make it more well thought out.

[Rotten_Apple]

Risen<o></o>

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<o> </o>

In a dead forest, I found myself alone
Dimmed from the moonlight of the red, winter sky
Blind sided by the colorless snow
And wrapped with old, seasoned trees
<o> </o>
Holding my breath for good and bad
I’m lost in my annoyed thoughts that grind my teeth
Anger turned into sadness which turned into tearless cries
Not knowing which direction I will fall, I wait
<o> </o>
Clouds hid the moon, snow cried to the ground
Wind blew the branches that made rhythmical waves
And in the distance of the hidden, crooked path
Came a white glow from the unknown darkness
<o> </o>
A beautiful girl in a gown approached upon the night
Long, blonde, snow flaked covered hair
Hard crystal iced blue eyes with a hint of Satan
And her lips were formed to a soft pink smile
<o> </o>
She stood in place and held out her hand
Without thought, I gave her the reach of my fingers
But not knowing, I gave her my frost bitten heart
And with a jolt that leads to an awkward comfort, I gave her my soul
<o> </o>
Falling to my knees, I looked into her with a strange sense of fear
She rose my chin and kissed my hard, pressed lips
And without a feeling of guilt, I left this torched world of mine
Tonight, a demon has risen above all, and all has forgotten

[Rotten_Apple]

uh sry, idk whats up with the smiley face bullshit. i jsut copied and pasted from microsoft word.

[Rotten_Apple]

Immune <o></o>

<o> </o>
<o> </o>
Head rush processin’
My chest is caving in
Can you give me a high?
<o> </o>
I’m here ‘n’ all alone
My pain can’t be shown
Can’t you hear me screaming?
<o> </o>
In the bottom of your heart
Stopped from the start
Blind and deaf in your head
<o> </o>
And I don’t ask you why
You’re just gunna lie
Tell yourself otherwise
<o> </o>
<o> </o>
Never let the lies burn your eyes
Let the truth rot in your mind
Don’t deny the facts of your life
You’re immune to everything
<o> </o>
<o> </o>
I know you cannot see
Someone please shoot me
Head falls dead to the floor
<o> </o>
So go and get so high
Let the time fly by
Hold your breath ‘til you die
<o> </o>
<o> </o>
Never let the lies burn your eyes
Let the truth rot in your mind
Don’t deny the facts of your life
You’re immune to everything
<o> </o>
<o> </o>
Take a hit, fly and be free
This is no trip, this is reality
Broke on your ass, beg on your knees
This is your life, this is reality
<o> </o>
<o> </o>
Never let the lies burn your eyes
Let the truth rot in your mind
Don’t deny the facts of your life
You’re immune to everything