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Old 12-15-2003, 10:43 PM
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mmm...from a writers point of view, theres a few things to point out on it. First, the boy is a bit young to be commiting murder, but eh in stories odd things happen. Seconds, a bit of grammer, but o well that can be corrected. its ....weird..but its your creation and keep working on it
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